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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important.

Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. MGQa

Nowadays, most of youth believe university degree is the best way to get a good job while others think that without soft skills it is quite difficult to compete for work in this temporary world that is full of challenges. I share this opinion and believe, that without skills it is pretty difficult to be a successfully employed. Firstly, students at universities lack practical experience in working environment. Problem solving, task management, decisiveness and working under pressure are essential traits to perform good work and to achieve success. For example, Steve Jobs managed to become the world’s one of the richest and influential person without higher /tertiary education and he is in the list of billionaires. . Secondly, in our country there is high rate of unemployment. However, most of people who are in constant seek for vacancies have university diplomas but still it is difficult for them to find a desired job. The best examples are taxi drivers who prove to have at least two diplomas but could not find a decent job. it is undeniable, that tertiary education is absolutely important to get employed but soft skills secure stability of the position. To sum up,

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