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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. NEyN
School is a institution where child can learn various activities and knowledge. In some places of country, people feels that school is the temple of knowledge. Some people think that classmates have a significant role in influencing children towards their success and other think that parents play an vital role in children’s success. I am partially agree with this statement. I describe my partial views in another paragraphs. On the one hand, children spent their valuable time with their mates and as children always keep learning they follow their classmate’s mindset and thinking. The most important thing is they spent learning time with them that place a great impact on their thinking, nature, and character which tends to success in school time. For instance, I and my friend start schooling simultaneously perhaps after third standard I make my friendship with valuable classmates and my friend with bad classmates. So as a result, I pass my school easily and he fails 3rd time in boards. On the other hand, parents influence impact their children everyday. He learns most of the characteristics from their parents. Every parent dream their children to get success in life. So that they always influence their children in best optimum way. Children behaviour depicts that he would success in school or not which was taught by their parents. To sum up, children success is relying on both parents and their classmates. Parents influence their children in emotional way whereas classmate encourage them to do thing practically possible. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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places of country,
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feels
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is the temple of knowledge.
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classmates
have a significant role in influencing
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children
towards their
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success
and other
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parents
play
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vital role in
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children’s
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success
. I am
partially
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agree
with this statement. I
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my partial views in another paragraphs.

On the one hand,
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children
spent their valuable
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time
with their mates and as
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children
always
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keep
learning they follow their
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classmate’s
mindset and thinking. The most
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important
thing is they spent learning
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time
with them that place a great impact on their thinking, nature, and character which tends to
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success
in
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school
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time
.
For instance
, I and my friend
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start
schooling
simultaneously
perhaps after third standard I
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make
my friendship with valuable
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classmates
and my friend with
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bad
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classmates
.
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as a result
, I pass my
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school
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easily and
he fails 3rd
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time
in boards.

On the other hand
,
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parents
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influence
impact their
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children
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everyday
. He learns most of the characteristics from their
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parents
. Every
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parent
dream
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their
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children
to
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get
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success
in life.
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they always
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influence
their
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children
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in best
optimum way.
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behaviour
depicts that he would
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success
in
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school
or not which
was taught
by their parents.

To sum up,
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children
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success
is relying on both
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parents
and their
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classmates
.
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Parents
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influence
their
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children
in emotional way whereas
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classmate
encourage them to do thing
practically
possible. Do you
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agree
or disagree with the following statement?

Classmates are a more
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important
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influence
than
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parents
on a child’s
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success
in school.

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specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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IELTS essay Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
282 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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