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In this set of materials, the reading passage discusses the benefits of imposing high taxes on cigarettes and unhealthy products. The listening, however, casts doubts on the reading by claiming that each benefit can be challenging. Firstly, the writer states that high taxes lead to fewer people buying them. But according to the professor, in this situation, people tend to buy cheaper and lower quality cigarettes and unhealthy foods that have more harmful substances; Therefore, they are exposed to greater risks by continuing to buy cheap ones. Secondly, the author declares that it is fair for people who eat unhealthy food and smoke to contribute more to medical costs. Contrary to the reading, the lecturer mentions that it might seem fair that they should pay for their consequences, but taxes are unfair for people with different incomes. For example, the one with a higher income than the one who has a lower income can benefit more. If lower earner and higher earner use a box of cigarettes each day, greater tax for lower-income has more burden. At last, the writer believes that high taxes can make revenue for the government. The professor refutes the reading by saying that government can earn millions of dollars, and after a while, it turns to a high income, so for not losing it, they do not enact laws or restrictions for preventing it. For example, smoking in public or out-door would not be prevented because they do not want to lose income.
In this set of materials, the
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reading
passage discusses the benefits of imposing
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high
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taxes
on cigarettes and unhealthy products. The listening,
however
, casts doubts on the
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reading
by claiming that each benefit can be challenging.

Firstly
, the writer states that
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high
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taxes
lead to fewer
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people
buying them.
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But
according to the professor, in this situation,
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people
tend to
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buy
cheaper and lower quality cigarettes and unhealthy foods that have more harmful substances;
Therefore
, they
are exposed
to greater
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risks
by continuing to
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buy
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cheap
ones.

Secondly
, the author declares that it is
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fair
for
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people
who eat unhealthy food and smoke to contribute more to medical costs. Contrary to the
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reading
, the lecturer mentions that it might seem
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fair
that they should pay for their consequences,
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but
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taxes
are unfair for
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people
with
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different
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incomes
.
For example
, the one with a higher
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income
than the one who has a lower
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income
can benefit more. If lower earner and higher earner
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use
a box of cigarettes each day, greater
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tax
for lower-income has more burden.

At last, the writer believes that
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high
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taxes
can
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make
revenue for the
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government
. The professor refutes the
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reading
by saying that
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government
can earn millions of dollars, and after a while, it turns to a
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high
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income
,
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so
for not losing it, they do not enact laws or restrictions for preventing it.
For example
, smoking in public or out-door would not be
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prevented
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they do not want to lose
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income
.
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IELTS essay cigarettes and unhealthy products

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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