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Children have to be punished to learn the difference between right and wrong. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishments should parents be able to give their children?

Children have to be punished to learn the difference between right and wrong. What sort of punishments should parents be able to give their children? qVajP
It is generally claimed that parents must punish their children in order to learn how to choose wrong and right in today's complex society. Personally, I partially agree and disagree with this point of view for some reasons. To my view, there should not be a special punishment that is given to kids by their parents. There is no doubt true that parents are compelled to teach their children do's and don'ts so that they are the most responsible people for kids. To certain point, I agree that children are supposed to be punished for something they did wrong. Of course, they need to be warned for this beforehand, however, if they continue doing this again, then parents must punish them. On the other hand, I disagree for some exceptional reasons. Everyone knows that drug addiction brings a disastrous life together to human beings. For example, if a teenager hangs out with someone who uses drugs, in this regard, parents do not have to punish him or her. It is because children might be agressive in this case, and they can run away from the house. Therefore, parents have to be near them to explain or illustrate others' life that how dangerous drugs are. From my perspective, humans have to let their offspring experience whatever they are doing. To put it simply, parents need to allow their children to choose wrong or right by themselves. They have to know what kinds of thing or behaviour are wrong or right. Only in this case, we will understand the gap between wrong and right. For instance, if an infant touches the fireplace, we should allow him or her to touch it because she or he will understand that it is dangerous while touching it. Besides that, there is not one-in-all solution for all children, in other words, each children has different personal characteristics. That is why, a punishment could not possibly work for everyone. To conclude, sometimes I agree and disagree with the point of punishing children to learn the disparity between wrong and right. And I am inclined to believe that no type of punishment can be useful for all children, there might be someone who needs punishment to avoid doing wrong, or there may be some children who needs a reasonable explanation to deviate from wrong things.
It is
generally
claimed that
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parents
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must
punish their
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children
in order to learn how to choose
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wrong
and
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right
in
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today
's complex society.
Personally
, I
partially
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agree
and disagree with this point of view for
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some
reasons. To my view, there should not be a special
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punishment
that is
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given
to kids by their parents.

There is no doubt true that
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parents
are compelled
to teach their
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children
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do's and don'ts
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so
that they are the most responsible
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people
for kids. To certain point, I
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agree
that
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children
are supposed
to
be punished
for something they did
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wrong
.
Of course
, they
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need
to
be warned
for this beforehand,
however
, if they continue doing this again, then
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parents
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must
punish them.
On the other hand
, I disagree for
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some
exceptional reasons. Everyone knows that drug addiction brings a disastrous life together to human beings.
For example
, if a
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teenager
hangs out with someone who
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uses
drugs, in this regard,
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parents
do not
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have to
punish him or her. It is
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because
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children
might be
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agressive
in this case
, and they can run away from the
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house
.
Therefore
,
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parents
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have to
be near them to
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explain
or illustrate others' life that how
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dangerous
drugs are.

From my perspective, humans
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have to
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let
their offspring experience whatever they are doing. To put it
simply
,
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parents
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need
to
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allow
their
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children
to choose
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wrong
or
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right
by themselves. They
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have to
know what kinds of thing or
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
are
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wrong
or
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right
.
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Only
in this case
, we will understand the gap between
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wrong
and
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right
.
For instance
, if an infant touches the fireplace, we should
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allow
him or her to touch it
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because
she or he will understand that it is
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dangerous
while touching it.
Besides
that, there is not one-in-all solution for all
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children
,
in other words
, each
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children
has
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different
personal characteristics.
That is
why, a
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punishment
could not
possibly
work for everyone.

To conclude
,
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sometimes
I
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agree
and disagree with the point of punishing
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children
to learn the disparity between
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wrong
and
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right
. And I
am inclined
to believe that no type of
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punishment
can be useful for all
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children
, there might be someone who
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needs
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punishment
to avoid doing
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wrong
, or there may be
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some
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children
who
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needs
a reasonable explanation to deviate from
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wrong
things.
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IELTS essay Children have to be punished to learn the difference between right and wrong. What sort of punishments should parents be able to give their children?

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