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Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? v.12

Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. with the statement? v. 12
TVs have become one of the efficient methods of teaching. Many people argue that adolescents are able to learn more effectively while they are watching televisions. Personally, I completely agree with the opinion that TVs can help students to escalate their knowledge. Firstly, this essay will discuss what certain TV channels might be useful for students to learn and secondly, it will examine why watching television at home can reduce the children's stress. First and foremost, I strongly believe that there is a whole host of helpful TV channels such as National Geographic and Animal Planet, which are absolutely fascinating to watch. For example, If students follow these channels I think they will significantly increase children's knowledge in one subject, namely Biology. These programs have a lucid animation as well, so it means that children are going to obtain more valuable information. As a result, I would argue that in most cases, televisions can be not only beneficial, but also interesting. Another point to consider is that watching TVs can diminish the stress that young people are vulnerable to receive at school. If, a child has gotten a bad mark in a particular subject, for instance, and then, classmates will probably degrade at him or her. In other words, when students watch television at home, no one can disturb them and they feel strong confidence. Although I think televisions make people less active, I believe that schools have physical education lessons In conclusion, TVs can be certainly useful for students to learn. In my own view, I feel strongly that televisions have a lot of benefits for some reason that I have discussed above. And I hope that schools will try to teach students through TVs
TVs have become one of the efficient methods of teaching.
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Many
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people
argue that adolescents are able to learn more
effectively
while they are watching
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televisions
.
Personally
, I completely
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agree
with the opinion that TVs can
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help
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students
to escalate their knowledge.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss what certain TV channels might be useful for
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students
to learn and
secondly
, it will examine why watching
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television
at home can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the children's
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stress
.

First
and foremost, I
strongly
believe that there is a whole host of helpful TV channels such as National Geographic and Animal Planet, which are
absolutely
fascinating to
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watch
.
For example
, If
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students
follow these channels I
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think
they will
significantly
increase children's knowledge in one subject,
namely
Biology. These programs have a lucid animation
as well
,
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so
it means that children are going to obtain more valuable information.
As a result
, I would argue that
in most cases
,
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televisions
can be not
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only
beneficial,
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but
also
interesting.

Another point to consider is that watching TVs can diminish the
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stress
that young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are vulnerable to receive at school. If, a child has gotten a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
mark in a particular subject,
for instance
, and then, classmates will
probably
degrade at him or her.
In other words
, when
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
television
at home, no one can disturb
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them and
they feel strong confidence. Although I
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think
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televisions
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make
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people
less active, I believe that schools have physical education
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lessons


In conclusion
, TVs can be
certainly
useful for
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students
to learn. In my
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own
view, I feel
strongly
that
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televisions
have
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a lot of
benefits for
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some
reason that I have discussed above. And I hope that schools will try to teach
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students
through
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TVs
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. with the statement? v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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