Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Charities and organizations always give special names to particular days such as 'National Children's Day' and 'National Non-smoking Day'. What are the causes of these particular days? How effective are they?

Charities and organizations always give special names to particular days such as 'National Children's Day' and 'National Non-smoking Day'. What are the causes of these particular days? How effective are they? EQO3
These days, many charities and organizations have created the special day's name, such as National Children's Day and National Non-smoking Day to appeal societies' attention. There are some reasons and impacts of such these special days, which I will explain further in this essay. There are some purposes, why charities and organizations have set up a special day. Take, National Children's Day for instance, it is a day, that aim to emphasis the societies to take care of children. In fact, quite a few children nowadays become the victim of their family or teacher, such as sexual abuse, human trafficking and so forth. Therefore, with this special day, the charities or organization could give the knowledge to societies regarding the children's right, and how to treat them with well-behaved in order to prevent children abuse. Furthermore, with such these special days, the charities and organizations are able to contribute to the society actively. Thus, for these reasons, the names of special days are created. In addition, the impacts of these special days could invite the societies to be more pay attentions upon issues occurring these days. Special days campaign that arranged by some organizations and charities about what they fight upon certain issues, will influence people to be better individuals. Non-smoking Day for example, this special day, will enhance people awareness towards the dangerous of smoking to health. Hence, effect of the special days can repair moral values in societies as well. In conclusion, it is clear that, the name of special days have contributed to societies positively. These special days possess an own purpose as reflected in the day's name itself. With host of special day's name created, it shows that there are still, people in this world that care towards each other.
These days,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charities
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organizations
have created the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
day's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
name
, such as National Children's Day and National Non-smoking Day to appeal societies' attention. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
reasons and impacts of such these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
days, which I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
further
in this essay.

There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
purposes, why
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charities
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organizations
have set up a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
day. Take, National Children's Day
for instance
, it is a day, that aim
Did you mean "to emphasize" (American English) or "to emphasise" (British English)?
to emphasis
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
societies
to take care of children. In fact, quite a few children nowadays become the victim of their family or teacher, such as sexual abuse, human trafficking and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
forth.
Therefore
, with this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
day, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charities
or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organization
could give the knowledge to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
societies
regarding the children's right, and how to treat them with well-behaved in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
children abuse.
Furthermore
, with such these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
days, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charities
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organizations
are able to contribute to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
actively
.
Thus
, for these reasons, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
names
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
days
are created
.

In addition
, the impacts of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
days could invite the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
societies
to be more pay attentions upon issues occurring these days.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Special
days campaign that arranged by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organizations
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charities
about what they fight upon certain issues, will influence
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to be better individuals. Non-smoking Day
for example
, this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
day, will enhance
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
awareness towards the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
of smoking to health.
Hence
, effect of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
days can repair moral values in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
societies
as well
.

In conclusion
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
name
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
days have contributed to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
societies
positively
. These
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
days possess an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
purpose as reflected in the day's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
name
itself. With host of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
day's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
name
created, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that there are
still
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in this world that care towards each other.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Charities and organizations always give special names to particular days such as 'National Children's Day' and 'National Non-smoking Day'. What are the causes of these particular days? How effective are they?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts