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Celebrities such as singers and film stars earn too much money, buy too many goods and care too little about other people.

Celebrities such as singers and film stars earn too much money, buy too many goods and care too little about other people. Moay6
Celebrities have a lot of fame in the public. Some believe that they earn huge amount, have luxurious life and have less generosity, while others disagree. While I disagree that celebrities doesn’t care about public, I do agree that they have high status with high renumeration. To begin with, famous personalities have huge amount, live in large houses, maintains status but they doesn’t care much about people only in few cases. For instance, politicians they care about people only in times of election or for campaigns. After that, they don’t care about public infrastructure, health, education funds which can benefit lot of people. All the budgets which were allocated to public amenities may get ended up with them or in terms of corruption. Changes must be brought in the thought process of celebrities to turn them into a magnanimous human beings that can contribute not only for the welfare of the people but also in development and growth of the nation. Strict rules must be introduced in constitution to penalise them, if done against the principles. Although, all celebrities are not same of one kind. They help to people in all aspects such as education of children, environmental concerns, supportive matters. For example, India faced dearth of water where many celebrities contributed their support and helped people. Leonardo Di Caprio responded to that environmental issue in India. If personalities as such extend their vote, it saves people from trouble-some situations, people gets more hope and courage to face challenges. It also indicates message to all over globe that public does include not only of general category but famous VIP as well. To conclude, I believe celebrities earn large sums of cash, have hifi lifestyle and care too little about public but they do have a sense of responsibility to be taken care of the public in challenging situations, if required.
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personalities have huge amount,
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houses
, maintains status
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they
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doesn’t
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care
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people
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in few cases.
For instance
, politicians they
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care
about
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people
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only
in times of election or for campaigns. After that, they don’t
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care
about
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public
infrastructure, health, education funds which can benefit
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lot of
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people
. All the budgets which
were allocated
to
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public
amenities may
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ended up with them or in terms of corruption.
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process of
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celebrities
to turn them into a magnanimous human
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beings
that can contribute not
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only
for the welfare of the
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people
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but
also
in development and growth of the nation. Strict
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must
be introduced
in constitution to
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penalise
them, if done against the principles.

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, all
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celebrities
are not same of one kind. They
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help
to
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people
in all aspects such as education of children, environmental concerns, supportive matters.
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, India faced dearth of water where
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many
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celebrities
contributed their support and
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helped
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people
. Leonardo Di
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Caprio
responded to that environmental issue in India. If personalities as such extend their vote, it saves
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people
from trouble-
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situations,
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people
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gets
more hope and courage to face challenges. It
also
indicates message to all over globe that
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public
does include not
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only
of general category
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VIP
as well
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, I believe
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celebrities
earn large sums of cash, have
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hifi
lifestyle and
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about
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public
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they do have a sense of responsibility to
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care
of the
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public
in challenging situations, if required.
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IELTS essay Celebrities such as singers and film stars earn too much money, buy too many goods and care too little about other people.

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