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CARS ARE GREATEST DANGERTO HUMAN LIFE TODAY

CARS ARE GREATEST DANGERTO HUMAN LIFE TODAY W565q
Every body like travelling. Travelling by car is very a comfortable. I think today almost all pupil have a car. Even some people have two or three. So people think: cars are greatest danger to human life. This sentence is true or false? First of all, we searching useful sides of cars. When the first car was created I believe all people were happy. Because they thought “It is horribly useful for us. ” Later new, modern cars created. People were happy too. Because modern car had difficult things. Today car is our second home. All like their cars. Because cars are easiest way to get somewhere. For example, you go to cinema, if you have a car you will go there very fast and easy. If you have not a car you may get a taxi, go to there. As opposed to the above ideas many people think “car is very dangerous for us ” IN fact there are many accidents with cars. It is also dangerous for children and others. Some people say any child going to school. A driver drive his car fast, and hit child. They think, If cars had not, we would be happy. It healthy for us. Taking everything into account, I think cars are not guilty. All guilt is not learn to drive best. They are driving very fast and death are many. Firstly, driver should learn how to drive.
Every body like travelling. Travelling by
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a comfortable
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today
almost all pupil have a
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some
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people
have two or three.
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So
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people
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think
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cars
are
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greatest
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danger
to human life. This sentence is true or false?

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First of all
,
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we searching
useful sides of
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cars
.
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When
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first
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was created
I believe all
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were happy.
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they
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“It is
horribly
useful for us. ” Later new, modern
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cars
created.
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People
were happy too.
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modern
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car
had difficult things.
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Today
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is our second home. All like their
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cars
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Because
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are
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easiest
way to
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get
somewhere.
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, you go to cinema, if you have a
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you will go there
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very
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fast
and easy. If you have not a
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you may
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get
a taxi,
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go to there
.

As opposed to the above
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ideas
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many
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think
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“car
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dangerous
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IN fact there are
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accidents with
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also
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for children
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and others
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people
say any child going to school. A driver drive his
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car
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fast
, and hit child. They
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think
, If
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cars
had not, we would be happy.
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It
healthy for us.

Taking everything into account, I
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think
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cars
are not guilty. All guilt is not
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learn
to drive best. They are driving
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very
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fast
and death are
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, driver should learn how to drive.
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IELTS essay CARS ARE GREATEST DANGERTO HUMAN LIFE TODAY

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
237 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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