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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? oApD
Over the last three decades, traffic congestion has become one of the urgent problems that the governments need to solve. The majority of people have preferred to drive their cars rather than using public transportation. Therefore, governments should encourage individuals to use public transport more than usual. Nowadays, developed countries have funded more money to improve transportation sectors. There are plenty of highways and main roads have been enhanced day by day although, authorities have supported infrastructure of railways, ferry lines and airports. For example, many subway stations are conveniently located at the workplace. If employees tend to commute via public transport, they can find many alternatives. On top of that, some countries prioritize constructing cycle routes that merge to roads. Some governments might impose more taxes for vehicles. It is a good way to reduce traffic jams and also it keeps a clean environment. On the other side of the coin, car ownership has risen significantly. Advanced car technologies have influenced users so they are eager to possess new ones. However, I believe that a car is necessary if you have a big family. Additionally, many young people make an effort to buy a car throughout their working life. It gives them independence but nobody wants to be stuck in traffic congestion. So citizens have to consider traffic intense day hours, they may use navigation not to cause intensity on the road. Another recommendation of that, trucks and articulated lorries have been restricted in the city center and highways at heavy traffic times to reduce congestion. In conclusion, governments need to impose traffic rules to reduce traffic jams. In addition to that, if the government put some incentives to increase cycling, some people may give up cars. It would be preferable if people find more options for commuting. Ultimately, people have become more conscientious so traffic congestions should become a downward trend.
Over the last three decades,
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traffic
congestion has become one of the urgent problems that the
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governments
need to solve. The majority of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have preferred to drive their
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cars
rather
than using public transportation.
Therefore
,
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governments
should encourage individuals to
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use
public transport more than usual.

Nowadays,
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developed countries
have funded more money to
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improve
transportation sectors. There are
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plenty
of highways and main roads have
been enhanced
day by day although, authorities have supported infrastructure of railways, ferry lines and airports.
For example
,
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many
subway stations are
conveniently
located at the workplace. If employees tend to commute via public transport, they can find
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many
alternatives.
On top of that
,
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some
countries prioritize constructing cycle routes that merge to roads.
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Some
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governments
might impose more taxes for vehicles. It is a
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good
way to
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reduce
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traffic
jams and
also
it
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keeps
a clean environment.

On the other side of the coin,
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car
ownership has risen
significantly
. Advanced
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car
technologies have influenced users
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so
they are eager to possess new ones.
However
, I believe that a
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car
is necessary if you have a
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big
family.
Additionally
,
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many
young
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people
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make
an effort to
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buy
a
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car
throughout their working life. It gives them independence
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but
nobody wants to
be stuck
in
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traffic
congestion.
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So
citizens
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have to
consider
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traffic
intense day hours, they may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
navigation not to cause intensity on the road. Another recommendation of that, trucks and articulated lorries have
been restricted
in the city center and highways at heavy
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traffic
times to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
congestion.

In conclusion
,
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governments
need to impose
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traffic
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rules
to
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reduce
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traffic
jams.
In addition
to that, if the
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government
put
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some
incentives to increase cycling,
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some
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people
may give up
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cars
. It would be preferable if
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people
find more options for commuting.
Ultimately
,
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people
have become more conscientious
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so
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traffic
congestions should become a downward trend.
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IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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