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By punishing murderer with the death penalty, society it also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison it a better punishment for murderers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Punishment is the weapon which society uses to limit and reduce murders’ actions. Punishment type and toughness are different according to the types of crime or action. The most serious crime, which is killing a person with previous planning, leads the murderer to the death penalty after making sure that he/she is the killer through clear proofs. This essay tackles and discusses two contrasting opinions. The first party believes that death penalty is essential and fair enough for killers. Whereas others see that it is fighting badness by badness and that does not generate good and balanced society. The first group of people who are pro penalty death have their own logical reasons for their opinion. They say that nothing is equal to life but life itself. So any other form of punishment will not be sufficient or fair. A human body is a unique private property and if somebody causes damage to it or destroys it, he/she must have the same damage. In addition to that making penalty extremely harsh is considered as an effective alarm or red light to whoever may think about committing crimes. Therefore the main aim of penalty will be achieved by reducing crime rates especially killing crimes which have bad results without sufficient compensate. On the other hand, there are many people who believe that death penalty is not the best punishment they say that death of criminal or murder will not make the victim return to life. So it is not perfect compensate for victim’s relatives. Although it seems that by killing murder the balance of society will be return, some experts believe that it will raise violence in the society. As a result, they recommend that life in prison sentence is better. That penalty makes killer think always about his crime. It is also lifelong mental punishment when he/she finds other prisons finish their sentences while he/she stash for the rest of his/her life. Finally, I agree with the first party because of the same reason which I have mentioned previously. Also, that opinion fits my religious belief as Muslim.
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Punishment
is the weapon which society
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uses
to limit and
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reduce
murders’ actions.
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Punishment
type and toughness are
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different
according to the types of
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crime
or action. The most serious
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crime
, which is killing a person with previous planning, leads the murderer to the death
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penalty
after making sure that
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he/she
is the killer through
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clear
proofs. This essay tackles and discusses two contrasting opinions. The
first
party believes that death
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penalty
is essential and
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fair
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enough
for killers. Whereas others
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see
that it is fighting badness by badness and that does not generate
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good
and balanced society.

The
first
group of
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people
who are pro
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penalty
death have their
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own
logical reasons for their opinion. They say that nothing is equal to
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life
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but
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life
itself.
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So
any
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other
form of
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punishment
will not be sufficient or
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fair
. A human body is a unique private property and if somebody causes damage to it or
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destroys
it,
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he/she
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must
have the same damage.
In addition
to that making
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penalty
extremely
harsh
is considered
as an effective alarm or red light to whoever may
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think
about committing
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crimes
.
Therefore
the main aim of
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penalty
will
be achieved
by reducing
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crime
rates
especially
killing
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crimes
which have
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bad
results without sufficient compensate.

On the
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other
hand, there are
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many
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people
who believe that death
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penalty
is not the best
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punishment
they say that death of criminal or murder will not
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make
the victim return to
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life
.
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So
it is not perfect compensate for victim’s relatives. Although it seems that by killing murder the balance of society will be return,
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some
experts believe that it will raise violence in the society.
As a result
, they recommend that
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life
in prison sentence is better. That
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penalty
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makes
killer
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think
always about his
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crime
. It is
also
lifelong mental
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punishment
when
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he/she
finds
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other
prisons finish their sentences while
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he/she
stash for the rest of his/her life.

Finally
, I
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agree
with the
first
party
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because
of the same reason which I have mentioned previously.
Also
, that opinion fits my religious belief as Muslim.
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IELTS essay By punishing murderer with the death penalty, society it also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison it a better punishment for murderers. with this statement?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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