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By punishing murder with the death penalty society is also guilty

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It is considered that, as a the serious crime has increased rapidly over the last decade, the societies are punishing the murders with the death penalty. According to my perspective. There are a few cases like a rape and murder that time criminal punished with a death penalty. I partially agree with this statement. I will discuss both view of point in the forthcoming paragraph. To commence with, there are various of factor to support my point that is why I think, these days, if a offender commit the murder then they will be punished. Every countries has its own rule and regulation. To elaborate it, in contemporary period, rape and crime are on the Rise that time criminal Punished with a death penalty. For instance can be seen in a various article of time of India which showed that if a culprit commit the murder in Saudi Arabia that Arabian government give the punished murder with the death penalty as a result it decrease the crime rate. Culprit think twice before any committing crime. On the other hand, there are a multi various reason why I think, nowadays, there are too much crime in the world. There are different type of crime like theft, robbery and drugs smugglers. In the case of drug smugglers are kept in prison that time people work in different different field like a carpenter and gardener and other that time government give a small amount of money to Prisoner. To explain it, government organise camp in prison related to moral value and skill that time prisoner change the mind and learn good habit. According to my opinion, they are a plethora reason I think, nowadays, crime rate has increasing day by day. Death penalty is necessary to prevent this so that the crime rate can be reduced. In conclusion, although, people need to accept responsibility for their action punishing murder with penalty is one way that the society can help people to realise the consequence of their action.
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serious
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crime
has increased
rapidly
over the last decade, the societies are punishing the
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murders
with the death
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penalty
. According to my perspective. There are a few cases like a rape and
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murder
that
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time
criminal
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punished
with a death
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penalty
. I
partially
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agree
with this statement. I will discuss both view of point in the forthcoming paragraph.

To commence with, there are various of factor to support my point
that is
why I
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think
, these days, if
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a
offender commit the
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murder
then they will be
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punished
.
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countries
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rule
and regulation. To elaborate it, in contemporary period, rape and
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crime
are on the Rise that
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time
criminal
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Punished
with a death
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penalty
.
For instance
can be
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seen
in a various article of
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time
of India which
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showed
that if a culprit commit the
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murder
in Saudi Arabia that Arabian
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government
give the
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punished
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murder
with the death
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penalty
as a result
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the
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crime
rate. Culprit
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think
twice
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before
any committing crime.

On the other hand
, there are a multi various reason why I
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think
, nowadays, there are too much
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crime
in the world. There are
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different
type of
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crime
like theft, robbery and drugs smugglers. In the case of drug smugglers are
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kept
in prison that
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time
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people
work in
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field like a carpenter and gardener and other that
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time
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government
give a
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small
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explain
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government
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organise
camp in prison related to moral value and
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skill
that
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time
prisoner
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change
the mind and learn
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good
habit.

According to my opinion, they are a plethora reason I
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think
, nowadays,
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crime
rate has increasing day by day. Death
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penalty
is necessary to
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prevent
this
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so
that the
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crime
rate can be
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reduced
.

In conclusion
, although,
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people
need to accept responsibility for their action punishing
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murder
with
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penalty
is one way that the society can
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help
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people
to
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the consequence of their action.
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IELTS essay By punishing murder with the death penalty society is also guilty

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
334 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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