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In this set of materials, the writer strongly postulates that because of the deceptive techniques which buzzers used to lure the consumers, it should be banned. As they don't give cues to the consumers that they are hired for their jobs. He further provides three reasons to endorse its idea. On the other hand, the professor states that it is a completely misleading perspective about buzzers and gainsays each of the arguments mentioned in the reading. First and foremost, the passage begins by asserting that it's people's right that they know the intention of buzzers is only to gain profit, after selling their products. As they could provide incorrect information about their product just for running their own business. Nonetheless, the lecture maintains that though people are being paid, they actually acknowledge the worth of the product they are selling. Moreover, their intention is not to misguide the public as their image of the product is based on reality. For instance, if they are praising something it is because they really like that, and personally experiment with the product. Therefore they are not making people perplexed, only for their own benefits. Next, the professor in the lecture further points on that people asks many questions about which they are concerned, and if they do not get satisfactory responses they simply leave the products and do not buy them. Subsequently, people clarify their all suspicions about the endorsements by asking general questions i. e quality, price, and durability. These claims refute the writer’s implication that buzzers do not have to answer the queries of buyers because they are not attentively listening to their acclamations. On the contrary, when buyers know that person selling the product is paid, they become doubtful and more cautious of the claims, made by buzzers. Ultimately, the article wraps his arguments by declaring that misguiding traps of the buzzers have catastrophic effects on social relationships as they break people's trust by hiding their inner intentions so people become suspicious of developing relationships. The speaker in the listening rebuts this point by insisting that if the product selling agents deal harshly with people the company does not recruit that agent again. because their experiences with people are flourishing, they gain people's trust and are open to the public about their dealings, therefore it has a positive influence on society.
In this set of materials, the writer
strongly
postulates that
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because
of the deceptive techniques which buzzers
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used
to lure the consumers, it should
be banned
. As they don't give cues to the consumers that they
are hired
for their jobs. He
further
provides three reasons to endorse its
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idea
.
On the other hand
, the professor
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states


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that
it is a completely misleading perspective about buzzers and gainsays each of the arguments mentioned in the reading.

First
and foremost, the passage
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begins
by asserting that it's
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people
's right that they know the intention of buzzers is
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only
to gain profit, after
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selling
their
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products
. As they could provide incorrect information about their
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product
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just
for running their
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own
business. Nonetheless, the lecture maintains that though
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people
are
being paid
, they actually acknowledge the worth of the
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product
they are
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selling
.
Moreover
, their intention is not to misguide the public as their image of the
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product
is based
on reality.
For instance
, if they are praising something it is
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because
they
really
like that, and
personally
experiment with the
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product
.
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Therefore
they are not making
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people
perplexed,
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only
for their
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own
benefits.

Next
, the professor in the lecture
further
points on that
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people
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asks
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many
questions about which they
are concerned
, and if they do not
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get
satisfactory responses they
simply
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leave
the
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products
and do not
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buy
them.
Subsequently
,
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people
clarify their all suspicions about the endorsements by asking general questions i. e quality, price, and durability. These claims refute the writer’s implication that buzzers do not
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have to
answer the queries of buyers
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because
they are not
attentively
listening to their
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acclamations
.
On the contrary
, when buyers know that person
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selling
the
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product
is paid
, they become doubtful and more cautious of the claims, made by buzzers.

Ultimately
, the article wraps his arguments by declaring that misguiding traps of the buzzers have catastrophic effects on social relationships as they break
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people
's trust by hiding their inner intentions
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so
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people
become suspicious of developing relationships. The speaker in the listening rebuts this point by insisting that if the
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product
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selling
agents deal
harshly
with
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people
the
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company
does not recruit that agent again.
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because
their experiences with
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people
are flourishing, they gain
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people
's trust and are open to the public about their dealings,
therefore
it has a
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positive
influence on society.
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IELTS essay Buzzing is becoming controversial topic

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
391 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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