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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets, and groceries, is becoming more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets, and groceries, is becoming more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience ero7
In recent years, the internet has become a very popular way to buy items. Especially during pandemic online shopping flourished. Some people think that going shopping is more reasonable, also online shopping faces a lot of risks but I believe that we can save time, energy and money buying things online. Firstly, It is now possible to purchase anything from clothing, shoes, and other goods online with one click from any place and time of your convenience. My packed schedule never allows me to go and enjoy shopping at the spot so I am a regular visitor of internet to browse for necessary things. Moreover, the internet has also made it easy for people to get information about new products and services. From my experience, I used to buy shoes at the virtual shop, which was cheaper compared to some shops near my houses. Secondly, the internet has also made it easier for people to find out what they want and check the rating of sellers. The internet has also made it easy for people to get information about new products and services. Some people think that while shopping online we are at risk to be hacked but I think today payment methods are secured and we can enjoy the process. Finally, rather than being inconvenient, shopping online is invaluable for most people. It saves money, time and energy. Depending on what kind of products you buy, you can look for the most sensible way of buying it.
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popular way to
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items.
Especially
during pandemic
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online
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shopping
flourished.
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Some
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people
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think
that going
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shopping
is more reasonable,
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online
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shopping
faces
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a lot of
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risks
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I believe that we can save time, energy and money buying things online.

Firstly
, It is
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now
possible to
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purchase
anything from clothing, shoes, and other
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goods
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online
with one click from any place and time of your convenience. My packed schedule never
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allows
me to go and enjoy
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shopping
at the spot
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so
I am a regular visitor of internet to browse for necessary things.
Moreover
, the internet has
also
made it easy for
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people
to
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get
information about new products and services. From my experience, I
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used
to
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buy
shoes at the virtual shop, which was cheaper compared to
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some
shops near my
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.

Secondly
, the internet has
also
made it easier for
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people
to find out what they want and
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check
the rating of sellers. The internet has
also
made it easy for
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people
to
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get
information about new products and services.
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Some
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people
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think
that while
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shopping
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online
we are at
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risk
to
be hacked
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but
I
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think
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today
payment methods are
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secured and
we can enjoy the process.

Finally
,
rather
than being inconvenient,
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shopping
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online
is invaluable for most
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people
. It saves money, time and energy. Depending on what kind of products you
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buy
, you can look for the most sensible way of buying it.
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IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets, and groceries, is becoming more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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