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Breath and take a decision

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The end of the basic school is in one of the most beautiful epochs for young people even more for the students who have already finished colleague, for this reason, some students opt to take a breath before starting university to travel around the world, meet people and new cultures or just to earn money and enjoy. In my opinion, I agree with the idea of taking a year out, only if there is an important reason to do it. As well as the time and energy that university requires is the most demanding item for students, the money is another problem. Personally, I consider the context of a student as a variable that must be taken into account, it is not a crime to not continue immediately with the next academic step, moreover, a financially and mentally prepared person could face a radical change in his life successfully. Contrary to, there are persons who decide to continue without any break and desert in the first period of the university for not feeling secure on what they really want to study. To sum up, the essay is focused on showing the reasons why it's good to take one sabbatical year and get ready for the next step. Anything that produces something good in a person will be considered positive in his future, and in this case, if a student achieves the peace he needs before continuing studying, he will gain more confidence in himself and will have experiences that other classmates do not.
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of the basic school is in one of the most
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epochs for young
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even more for the
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students
who have already finished colleague,
for this reason
,
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some
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students
opt to take a breath
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before
starting university to travel around the world,
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meet
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people
and new cultures or
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just
to earn money and enjoy. In my opinion, I
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agree
with the
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idea
of taking a year out,
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only
if there is an
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important
reason to do it.

As well
as the time and energy that university requires is the most demanding item for
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students
, the money is another problem.
Personally
, I consider the context of a
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student
as a variable that
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must
be taken
into account, it is not a crime to not continue immediately with the
next
academic step,
moreover
, a
financially
and mentally prepared person could face a radical
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change
in his life
successfully
. Contrary to, there are persons who decide to continue without any break and desert in the
first
period of the university for not feeling secure on what they
really
want to study.

To sum up, the essay
is focused
on showing the reasons why it's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
to take one sabbatical year and
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get
ready for the
next
step. Anything that produces something
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good
in a person will
be considered
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positive
in his future, and
in this case
, if a
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student
achieves the peace he needs
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before
continuing studying, he will gain more confidence in himself and will have experiences that other classmates do not.
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IELTS essay Breath and take a decision

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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