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Boys are most influenced by their fathers and girls are most influenced by their mothers. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons to support your opinion.

Boys are most influenced by their fathers and girls are most influenced by their mothers. Use specific reasons to support your opinion. rBp6

It is true that nowadays parent have a great influence over the children. Some people hold the opinion that the same sex is the major determination of influencing parent, but others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, I agree that boys are most influenced by their fathers and girls are most influenced by their mothers. My arguments for this point are listed below. First of all, a father is the person who have already passed that ways which are his son is passing now, in other words, sons are following their father’s footsteps. So, based on experience it is easy for a father to notice his sons’ drawbacks and to influence them. Secondly, it is true that a boy is countedas a strong characteristics human, but a girl is a subtle and fragile one. It is hard for mothers to influence their sons, because it is not likely that vulnerable something can affect a strong one. In conclusion, it seems to me unfair that boys are most influenced by their mothers. Based on at least two points above I strongly agree that children are influenced by a parent of the same gender.

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 hold the opinion that the same sex is the major determination of influencing parent, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 others have a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
 attitude. As far as I am concerned
, I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 that boys are most influenced by their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdadpredecessorancestorparent
fathers
 and girls are most influenced by their mothers. My arguments for this point are listed
 below.

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son
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now
, in other words
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father’s
 footsteps. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
, based on experience it is easy for a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdadpredecessorancestorparent
father
 to notice his You use this word too often, consider replacing it withboyheiroffspringdescendant
sons’
 drawbacks and to influence them.

Secondly
, it is true that a boy is Possible spelling mistake found.counted as
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 a strong characteristics human, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 a girl is a subtle and fragile one. It is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
 for mothers to influence their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withboyheiroffspringdescendant
sons
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it is not likely that vulnerable something can affect a strong one.

In conclusion
, it seems to me unfair that boys are most influenced by their mothers. Based on at least two points above I strongly
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agree
 that children are influenced
 by a parent of the same gender. 