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Blind old lady coveats by doctor but at last old lady's wisdom saver her from doctor's greed

Blind old lady coveats by doctor but at last old lady's wisdom saver her from doctor's greed bwPW
It is an unfortunate moment when an old lady becomes blind. She does not know whether she is going to get cured or not. She is praying to God in a hope that her blindness can be cured. She thinks that on the Earth doctor's profession is like God's mercy upon us. Therefore, she calls in for a doctor. Doctor visits to an old lady's home and sees well-furnished Bungalow. Doctor also notes that an lady is staying alone and he can take advantage of her blindness. During the discussion with an old lady, doctor asks for a large amount of fee to cure her blindness, but she puts a condition that if she sees everything like before after her treatment, then only she will pay him full money; otherwise, no payment. Doctor calls daily an old lady for treatment. By the time lady visits a doctor, he covets lady's furniture. Now, doctor has become very greedy so he delays the cure. Everyday, he takes away some of her furniture. At last he cures her. An old lady is very happy because she is able to see the world once again, but when she looks at her Bungalow, half of her furniture is not there. She understood that doctor has taken an advantage of her blindness and taken her furniture. She also knows that she has to pay large amount of fees to the Doctor. Doctor demands to pay his final fee to an old lady but she refused to pay to the doctor stating that her cure is not complete. Doctor files a case against her and brings her to court. Judge asks lady why she is refusing to pay fees. She says that her sight is not properly restored. She cannot see all her furniture. Judge quickly understand that doctor has cheated on her and gives verdict in her favour. The moral of this story is never too greedy. If you do wrong to someone today or tomorrow you will also get bad rewards for your bad karma.
It is an unfortunate moment when an
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old
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lady
becomes blind. She does not know whether she is going to
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get
cured or not. She is praying to God in a hope that her blindness can
be cured
.
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She
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thinks
that on the Earth doctor's profession is like God's mercy upon us.
Therefore
, she calls in for a
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doctor
.
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Doctor
visits to an
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old
lady's home and
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sees
well-furnished Bungalow.
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Doctor
also
notes that
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an
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lady
is staying
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alone and
he can take advantage of her blindness.

During the discussion with an
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old
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lady
,
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doctor
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asks for
a large amount of fee to
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cure
her blindness,
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but
she puts a condition that if she
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sees
everything like
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before
after her treatment, then
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only
she will
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pay
him full money;
otherwise
, no payment.

Doctor calls daily an
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old
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lady
for treatment. By the time
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lady
visits a
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doctor
, he covets lady's
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furniture
.
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Now
,
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doctor
has become
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very
greedy
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so
he delays the
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cure
.
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Everyday
, he takes away
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some
of her
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furniture
. At
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last he
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cures
her. An
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old
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lady
is
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very
happy
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because
she is able to
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see
the world once again,
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but
when she looks at her Bungalow, half of her
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furniture
is not there. She understood that
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doctor
has taken an advantage of her blindness and taken her
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furniture
. She
also
knows that she
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has to
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pay
large amount of fees to the
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Doctor
.
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Doctor
demands to
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pay
his final fee to an
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old
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lady
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but
she refused to
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pay
to the
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doctor
stating that her
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cure
is not complete.
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Doctor
files a case against her and brings her to court. Judge asks
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lady
why she is refusing to
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pay
fees.

She says that her sight is not
properly
restored. She cannot
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see
all her
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furniture
. Judge
quickly
understand that
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doctor
has cheated on her and gives verdict in her
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favour
. The moral of this story is never too greedy. If you do
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wrong
to someone
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today
or tomorrow you will
also
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get
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bad
rewards for your
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bad
karma.
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IELTS essay Blind old lady coveats by doctor but at last old lady's wisdom saver her from doctor's greed

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
5.5
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