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Being literate in technology or the internet is so popular that it will no longer be necessary to read conventional books as the main source of material for education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Being literate in technology or the internet is so popular that it will no longer be necessary to read conventional books as the main source of material for education. Aj1Wn
In modern era, many people claim that do not need to read traditional paper based books anymore due to development of technology. There are numerous platform to gain knowledge regarding education on internet. I strongly agree with the notion that I will discuss more briefly in the upcoming paragraphs. To begin with first reason, students prefer to read online books. In other words, nowadays, there are many subjects offered by training center not only academic but non academic also. They have a lot of material to learn, so, more like e-books rather than common books. Additionally, there are very less chances of misplace and lost of data. Secondly, few pupils used to gain knowledge by listening as many companies offer audio books summary. That's why they more prefer to listen audio books while they doing regular activities. For example, Amazon company recently show that more than 50% customers have been bought either e-books or audio books. Thus, digital as well as audio books are more popular among young generation rather than typical books. Moving ahead to the next reason, digital books are better option to keep safe reading content. To go into details, usual books have a lot of pages that written. It is very difficult to remember whole material. Sometimes pages whether lost or may be ruined by mistake. Furthermore, it is very easy to travel with online books rather than taking burden of heavy typical books. For instance, last year, various schools had been taught academic subjects through digital books due to lockdown. Hence, e-books are favourable among both readers and teachers. In conclusion, because of electronic books, chances of lost reading material as well as stress of keep book from one place to another place.
In modern era,
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many
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people
claim that do not need to read traditional paper based
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books
anymore due to development of technology. There are numerous
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platform
to gain knowledge regarding education on internet. I
strongly
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agree
with the notion that I will discuss more
briefly
in the upcoming paragraphs.

To
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begin
with
first
reason, students prefer to read online
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books
.
In other words
, nowadays, there are
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many
subjects offered by training center not
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only
academic
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but
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non academic
also
. They have
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a lot of
material to learn,
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so
, more like e-books
rather
than common
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books
.
Additionally
, there are
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very
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less
chances of misplace and lost of data.
Secondly
, few pupils
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used
to gain knowledge by listening as
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many
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companies
offer audio
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books
summary. That's why they more prefer to listen audio
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books
while
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they doing
regular activities.
For example
, Amazon
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company
recently
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show
that more than 50% customers have been
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bought
either e-books or audio
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books
.
Thus
, digital
as well
as audio
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books
are more popular among young generation
rather
than typical books.

Moving ahead to the
next
reason, digital
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books
are better option to
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keep
safe reading content. To go into
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details
, usual
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books
have
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a lot of
pages that written. It is
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very
difficult to remember whole material.
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Sometimes
pages whether lost or may
be ruined
by mistake.
Furthermore
, it is
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very
easy to travel with online
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books
rather
than taking burden of heavy typical
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books
.
For instance
, last year, various schools had
been taught
academic subjects through digital
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books
due to lockdown.
Hence
, e-books are
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favourable
among both readers and teachers.

In conclusion
,
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because
of electronic
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books
, chances of lost reading material
as well
as
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stress
of
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keep
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
from one place to another place.
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IELTS essay Being literate in technology or the internet is so popular that it will no longer be necessary to read conventional books as the main source of material for education.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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