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Bad experience Customer Service You Had When Buying a product

Bad experience Customer Service You Had When Buying a product 2xK6M
When I buy something, if the customer service of that store is so bad, regardless of how excellent the product is, I will never return it. Because that made me feel insulted and unappreciative of that store. I recall stopping by the Guardian store after school to get some cosmetics. When I arrived, I had to maneuver my car into the parking lot without assistance from a security guy, who was sleeping and listening to music. This slightly irritates me. Even though the store was not crowded but when I opened the door to enter, there was no one to greet me. The staff members who were grouped together talking and staring at me made me feel quite uneasy. I had a difficult time finding the item I wanted on the shelf. When I enquired about this face cleanser brand, an employee with an angry expression came out. After speaking with me about which sort would be best for my face, I was considering options then my sister requested me to purchase her a bottle of sunscreen so I just went there to see. I overheard her employee complainning: "ask a lot but don't purchase, ". I'm not sure why such a major shop offers such bad customer service. I was enraged by her complaint, so I returned the products and leave. I will never use that brand again.
When I
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buy
something, if the customer service of that
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store
is
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so
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bad
, regardless of how excellent the product is, I will never return it.
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Because
that made me feel insulted and unappreciative of that
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store
. I recall stopping by the Guardian
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store
after school to
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get
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some
cosmetics. When I arrived, I had to maneuver my car into the parking lot without assistance from a security guy, who was sleeping and listening to music. This
slightly
irritates me.
Even though
the
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store
was not crowded
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but
when I opened the door to enter, there was no one to greet me. The staff members who
were grouped
together talking and staring at me made me feel quite uneasy. I had a difficult time finding the item I wanted on the shelf. When I
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enquired
about this face cleanser brand, an employee with an angry expression came out. After speaking with me about which sort would be best for my face, I was considering options then my sister requested me to
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purchase
her a bottle of sunscreen
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so
I
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just
went there to
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see
. I overheard her employee
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complainning
:
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"
ask a lot
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but
don't
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purchase
,
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"
. I'm not sure why such a major shop offers such
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bad
customer service.
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I
was enraged
by her
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complaint
,
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so
I returned the products and
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leave
.
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I
will never
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use
that brand again.
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IELTS essay Bad experience Customer Service You Had When Buying a product

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
229 words
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