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As the population of a Nation increases, new houses are needed.

As the population of a Nation increases, new houses are needed. n1e1n
Undoubtedly, as the country's population grows, more houses are needed to be built to accommodate a rapidly growing population. The governments have always been wary of population boom/explosion. They are justifiably worried about constructing new accommodations matching the pace of the growing population. If government fail to do so, it will create a chaotic situation among specific demographics of the society. Due to the skyrocketing demand for bigger and better houses, the property rate will also rise; as a result of this, everyone won't be able to buy expensive properties, and many homes will remain unsold. This situation might result in builders getting bankrupt, and then you as a country won't be able to meet the requirements in the future. Because with the increasing number of family members other living expenses will also increase. So the government should also keep this factor in mind and plan accordingly. Let us take the example of India and Mumbai city, to be more precise. In the past decade population of India has overgrown, and so has Mumbai's. Therefore, the state and the central government have planned many redevelopments, reconstruction and construction projects. As a result, the city has witnessed enormous growth, and people in Mumbai has got many beautiful homes for their family, but now tables have turned. Now no ordinary man can buy a house for their family due to the high property rates. To conclude, I would like to say that the home is essential for humans to survive on this planet. And building houses needs to be the topmost priority for any ruling government, taking an average income of an average family into consideration, which won't create nationwide chaos.
Undoubtedly
, as the country's
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population
grows, more
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houses
are needed
to
be built
to accommodate a
rapidly
growing population.

The
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governments
have always been wary of
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population
boom/explosion. They are
justifiably
worried about constructing new accommodations matching the pace of the growing
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population
. If
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government
fail to do
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so
, it will create a chaotic situation among specific demographics of the society. Due to the skyrocketing demand for bigger and better
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houses
, the property rate will
also
rise;
as a result
of this, everyone won't be able to
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buy
expensive properties, and
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many
homes will remain unsold.

This situation might result in builders getting bankrupt, and then you as a country won't be able to
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meet
the requirements in the future.
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Because
with the increasing number of
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family
members other living expenses will
also
increase.
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So
the
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government
should
also
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keep
this factor in mind and plan
accordingly
.
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Let
us take the example of India and Mumbai city, to be more precise. In the past decade
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population
of India has overgrown, and
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so
has Mumbai's.
Therefore
, the state and the central
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government
have planned
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many
redevelopments, reconstruction and construction projects.
As a result
, the city has witnessed enormous growth, and
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people
in Mumbai has
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got
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many
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beautiful
homes for their
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family
,
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but
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now
tables have turned.
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Now
no ordinary
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man
can
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buy
a
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house
for their
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family
due to the high property rates.

To conclude
, I would like to say that the home is essential for humans to survive on this planet. And building
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houses
needs to be the topmost priority for any ruling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
, taking an average income of an average
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
into consideration, which won't create nationwide chaos.
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IELTS essay As the population of a Nation increases, new houses are needed.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6.0
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