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in this modern era people believe that high school students should engage in unpaid community service and it must be compulsory part of their school life. I partly agree with this statement on one hand, distance from the young age on words should start their services in the community which they live in. this help the students to improve different sets of life skill which would help them in future. and when the social works are continued the students would come to know about their responsibilities and would start thinking as a responsible citizen thus, good future generation is brought up. for example when students are given a chance to volunteer in a charitable organisation it helps them to interact with the number of people does this would be an exchange of knowledge which in turn helps the students to improve different skills on the other hand, when these activities are made compulsory. there will be a number of students attending these programs who are not interested. this would not this would not this would not be any good for them or the organisation there would be a waste of time and money. the decision making power should be left with student so that they could choose activities according to their taste and skills. engage in activities which they like they would show their true potential and it would help their future. to conclude, student must be angrej to join community services but it should never be forced and the decision making power should be left with students
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this modern era
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believe that high school
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should engage in unpaid community service and it
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must
be compulsory part of their school life. I partly
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on
one hand, distance from the young age on words should
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start
their services in the community which they
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live
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help
the
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students
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improve
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different
sets of life
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skill
which would
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help
them
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in future
.
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and
when the social works
are continued
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students
would
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come
to know about their responsibilities and would
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start
thinking as a responsible citizen
thus
,
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future generation
is brought
up.
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are
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given
a chance to volunteer in a charitable
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organisation
it
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helps
them to interact with the number of
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people
does this would be an exchange of knowledge which in turn
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helps
the
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improve
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different
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on the other hand
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compulsory.
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there
will be a number of
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attending these programs who are not interested.
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for them or the
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there would be a waste of time and money.
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decision making
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student
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so
that they could choose activities according to their taste and
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skills
.
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engage
in activities which they like they would
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show
their true potential and it would
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help
their future.

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to
conclude,
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student
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join
community services
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students
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IELTS essay are engaged to join public services

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
257 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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