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An increasing number of us travel abroad for tourism these days. What can be done to ensure that we do not ruin the destinations we love to visit?

An increasing number of us travel abroad for tourism these days. What can be done to ensure that we do not ruin the destinations we love to visit? PV8EB
Tourism implies the movement of people from one place to another place for varied reasons. However, the soaring number of us visit various destinations overseas on certain days and due to that, places are devasting. So, this essay delineates a brief description of my perception regarding us who frequently travel, and which prevention action would be taken to halt the destruction to ubiquitous places. To commence with, currently, tourism is the key source of economic revolution and it augments due to new development of amenities as well as infrastructures. To justify, we move on at different places, to visit developed buildings and gardens that were recently installed and renders an enticeable view too. For instance, the Sardar Vallabhbhai Patel statue is newly placed in the riverside area of the Narmada river, which has become a tourist place now but somehow it contains plenty of garbage. Thus, numerous times I am being there with my kith and kin and we always ensure that we did not make any ruins to such a renowned place. Moreover, there are several measures which we should follow when we travel to different places. Likewise, using paper bags instead of plastic bags, limited things should be carried and provide advice to others for being a responsible traveller. By this, I mean that these precautions should always be decided first, especially, whenever we travel to different destinations. Hence, being a responsible visitor creates our personality positively in front of others. Agglomerating, I avow, though as a visitor I always follow my rules and regulations with required accessories, I also recommend these things to be obeyed to others. So, this way we can provide safety to tourist destinations.
Tourism implies the movement of
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people
from one
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place
to another
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place
for varied reasons.
However
, the soaring number of us visit various destinations overseas on certain days and due to that,
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places
are
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devasting
.
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So
, this essay delineates a brief description of my perception regarding us who
frequently
travel, and which prevention action would
be taken
to halt the destruction to ubiquitous places.

To commence with,
currently
, tourism is the key source of economic revolution and it augments due to new development of amenities
as well
as infrastructures. To justify, we
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move
on at
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different
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places
, to visit developed buildings and gardens that were recently installed and renders an
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enticeable
view too.
For instance
, the
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Sardar
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Vallabhbhai
Patel statue is
newly
placed in the riverside area of the Narmada river, which has become a tourist
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place
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now
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but
somehow it contains
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plenty
of garbage.
Thus
, numerous times I am being there with my kith and
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kin and
we always ensure that we did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
any ruins to such a renowned place.

Moreover
, there are several measures which we should follow when we travel to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
.
Likewise
, using paper bags
instead
of plastic bags, limited things should
be carried
and provide advice to others for being a responsible
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traveller
. By this, I mean that these precautions should always
be decided
first
,
especially
, whenever we travel to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
destinations.
Hence
, being a responsible visitor creates our personality
positively
in front of others.

Agglomerating, I avow, though as a visitor I always follow my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations with required accessories, I
also
recommend these things to
be obeyed
to others.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, this way we can provide safety to tourist destinations.
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IELTS essay An increasing number of us travel abroad for tourism these days. What can be done to ensure that we do not ruin the destinations we love to visit?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
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