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An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend v.13

An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend v. 13
It is irrefutable that technology is convenient and efficient. Nowadays, people are more familiar with technology and uses it in every field like in schools, in transportation and much more places. If talking about schools, they are also provided gadgets like tablets and systems for students for their education. In this essay, I intend to delve into the advantages outweigh disadvantages. First and foremost, education is an essential part of life and it' s started from school. Over the few years ago, sources of learning are books or papers but todays these are replaced by technology gadgets like computers, tablets, e-books. Technology has provided lots of benefits to students, like they can study anywhere by using e-books. Gadgets like tablet are also easy to carry with them so that no more stress about study if students are out of town. Secondly, for schools faculties no need to worry about missing exams papers or assignments. It helps to save data for long time so exam papers or assignment done by the student can save individual as well as it saved in schools record. If students taking their exams in papers they are worry about handwriting as because handwriting is a crucial part of exams but using laptops in exams they are free to express their answers without any worry. Also not using papers helps to save plants. On the other hand, using gadgets directly or indirectly affects students health. There is a very common and true saying that Health is Wealth. Continuously sitting in front of laptop may cause of headache or other eye disease. To conclude, providing gadgets like tablets or laptops are beneficial for students but also they have to taken care of their health as well.
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technology
is convenient and efficient. Nowadays,
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people
are more familiar with
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technology
and
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uses
it in every field like in
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schools
, in transportation and much more places. If talking about
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schools
, they are
also
provided
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gadgets
like tablets and systems for
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students
for their education. In this essay, I intend to delve into the advantages outweigh disadvantages.

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and foremost, education is an essential part of life and
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technology
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gadgets
like computers, tablets, e-books.
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Technology
has provided lots of benefits to
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students
, like they can study anywhere by using e-books.
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like tablet are
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that no more
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about study if
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Secondly
, for
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schools
faculties no need to worry about missing exams papers or assignments. It
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helps
to save data for long time
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exam papers or assignment done by the
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student
can save individual
as well
as it saved in
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schools
record. If
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students
taking their exams in papers they are
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about handwriting as
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handwriting is a crucial part of exams
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using laptops in exams they are free to express their answers without any worry.
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not using papers
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helps
to save plants.

On the other hand
, using
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directly
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affects
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students
health. There is a
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common and true saying that Health is Wealth.
Continuously
sitting in front of laptop may cause of headache or other eye disease.

To conclude
, providing
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like tablets or laptops are beneficial for
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students
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also
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have to
taken care of their health
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IELTS essay An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend v. 13

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
288 words
5.5
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