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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems do this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems do this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation? kY65R
Migration of highly skilled workers is a bane for developing or underdeveloped countries. This is mainly because the loss of qualified workforce leads to the stagnation of development in these countries. There are a number of solutions that can be implemented to deal with brain drain from poor countries. Firstly, the main problem associated with brain drain / the migration of skilled workers is that poorer countries need them to grow economically. This is to say there are various areas like healthcare and technology, where these countries need to develop themselves and they fail due to shortage of manpower. To illustrate, Nigeria has an underdeveloped healthcare sector due to shortage of qualified doctors leading to under development in other industries. Secondly, if the rate of brain drain is not tackled poor countries will become poorer while strong economies will take advantage of it. First world nations have already peaked their development. It is poor countries that require more human resources to create wealth for their citizens. There are two effective solutions to deal with this problem. One way to discourage brain drain is through rewarding and recognizing talent. This is because with good pay they can enjoy a good lifestyle similar to what developed countries offer and through recognition they will be widely accoladed for their contributions to society. Another solution is providing these prodigies with a special status in the country. Through this status they will feel that their presence is highly respected and required in their own country than others. One clear example is the recognition given to Indian Army through tax breaks, subsidized housing and government aid for children’s education. To conclude, when the qualified labour moves to other countries it costs a poor nation its economic development and monetary growth. This can be tackled by extensively recognizing their talent with good salaries, awards and granting them special stature.
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highly
skilled workers is a bane for developing or underdeveloped
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countries
. This is
mainly
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because
the loss of qualified workforce leads to the stagnation of
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development
in these
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countries
. There are a number of solutions that can
be implemented
to deal with
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brain
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drain
from
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poor
countries.

Firstly
, the main problem associated with
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brain
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drain
/ the migration of skilled workers is that poorer
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countries
need them to grow
economically
. This is to say there are various areas like healthcare and technology, where these
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countries
need to develop
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themselves and
they fail due to shortage of manpower. To illustrate, Nigeria has an underdeveloped healthcare sector due to shortage of qualified doctors leading to under
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development
in other industries.
Secondly
, if the rate of
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brain
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drain
is not tackled
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poor
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countries
will become poorer while strong economies will take advantage of it.
First
world nations have already peaked their
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development
. It is
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poor
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countries
that require more human resources to create wealth for their citizens.

There are two effective solutions to deal with this problem. One way to discourage
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brain
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drain
is
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through
rewarding and recognizing talent. This is
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because
with
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good
pay they can enjoy a
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good
lifestyle similar to what developed
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countries
offer and
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through
recognition they will be
widely
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accoladed
for their contributions to society. Another solution is providing these prodigies with a special status in the
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country
.
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Through
this status they will feel that their presence is
highly
respected and required in their
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own
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country
than others. One
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clear
example is the recognition
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given
to Indian Army
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through
tax breaks, subsidized housing and
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government
aid for children’s education.

To conclude
, when the qualified
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labour
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moves
to other
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countries
it costs a
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poor
nation its economic
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development
and monetary growth. This can
be tackled
by
extensively
recognizing their talent with
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good
salaries, awards and granting them special stature.
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IELTS essay An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems do this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

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