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An experience that helped you overcome fear

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My an experience to overcome to my fear is about travel alone. I hated and scared a lot of traveling with my self because I thought it is dangoures and can’t did it until when I was 24. One day my mother offered to me go to brother’s house in Moscow for two weeks, absolutely I said no because I didn’t want to go any where with out my parents. My family convinced me and then I accepted. Those two weeks was awesome because of my brother. After one year I went to trip with my friends and until today I have a lot of trip. I have go to abroad twice. I understood not only traveling with my self is not horrible but also it is wonderful.
My an experience to overcome to my fear is about travel alone. I hated and scared
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a lot of
traveling with my self
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because
I
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thought
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dangoures
and can’t
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did
it until when I was 24. One day my mother offered to me go to brother’s
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house
in Moscow for two weeks,
absolutely
I said no
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because
I didn’t want to go
Did you mean "anywhere"?
any where
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with out
my parents. My family convinced me and then I
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accepted
. Those two weeks was awesome
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because
of my brother. After one year I went to trip with my friends and until
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today
I have
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a lot of trip
. I have
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go to abroad
twice. I understood not
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only
traveling with my self is not horrible
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but
also
it is wonderful.
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IELTS essay An experience that helped you overcome fear

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  American English
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