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An email to friend who miss out a cycling event

An email to friend who miss out a cycling event gYyV7
From: Liza Subject: Cycling Events Hi, Good to hear from you. Are you feeling better now? I hope your body had recover. It is okay that you missed this event, there are still many cycling events which are going to be held in the coming June! And don’t be upset that you had missed it, I will tell you all about the cycling event on that day. The cycling event that was held in conjunction with National Day was successful and fun albeit extremely hot on that day. The event started with a speech from the organizer and then followed by the section of doing some warm up exercises. The most interesting section of this cycling event was the “making friends” section! All the participants shook hands with each other no matter of different religious or races. They were all so friendly! We even exchanged our contacts number with each other! Besides, the participants held each other’s hand and shouted “Merdeka” together for 7 times. It was a really impressive and stunning spectacle that I could still remember it clearly now! For the coming cycling event, I think I am not able to join with you because I am going to have an English writing contest soon and I would need to prepare for it. I am sorry about this, maybe we can join together next time? I am looking forward to joining events with you. Write Soon! Liza
From: Liza

Subject:
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Cycling
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Events


Hi,

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Good
to hear from you. Are you feeling better
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now
? I hope your body had
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recover
. It is okay that you missed this
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event
, there are
still
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many
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cycling
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events
which are going to
be held
in the coming June! And don’t
be upset
that you had missed it, I will
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tell
you all about the
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cycling
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event
on that day. The
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cycling
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event
that
was held
in conjunction with National Day was successful and fun albeit
extremely
hot on that day.

The
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event
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started
with a speech from the organizer and then followed by the section of doing
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some
warm up exercises.
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The
most interesting section of this
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cycling
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event
was the “making friends” section! All the participants shook hands with each other no matter of
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different
religious or races. They were all
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so
friendly! We even exchanged our contacts number with each other!
Besides
, the participants held each other’s hand and shouted “
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Merdeka
” together for 7 times. It was a
really
impressive and stunning spectacle that I could
still
remember it
clearly
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now
!

For the coming
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cycling
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event
, I
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think
I am not able to
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join
with you
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because
I am going to have an English writing contest
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soon
and I would need to prepare for it. I am sorry about this, maybe we can
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join
together
next
time? I am looking forward to joining
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events
with you.

Write
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Soon
!

Liza
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IELTS essay An email to friend who miss out a cycling event

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
238 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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