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An activity that you enjoy that takes place in or near water

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I THINK A LOT OF PEOPLE like to spend their time near the water. Because it is the best and most effective way to spend time. Spending time there relaxes the human brain. Since there is peace and scenic beauty. I have visited many places where near the water and I enjoyed the scenic beauty and vast water very much. I would like to talk about a river I visited two years back. One day we decided to go near water and we prepared things what we need and we took them with us. Then we went there in the afternoon. We do a lot of activities there. My father and my brother went to fishing. And my mother and I cooked fish. My sister made a tower out of sand. We enjoyed being near the water. After that we started to go near the water very fast.
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much. I would like to talk about a river I visited two years back. One day we decided to go
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activities there. My father and my brother went to fishing. And my mother and I cooked fish. My sister made a tower out of sand. We enjoyed being
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IELTS essay An activity that you enjoy that takes place in or near water

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  American English
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148 words
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