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Although you are presenting different points of views in your essay, you must present a clear position. This simply means you must let the examiner

Although you are presenting different points of views in your essay, you must present a clear position. This simply means you must let the examiner gmRg
It is believed that rich countries help poor countries financially, but it does not help poor countries to eradicate poverty, so to solve this problem rich countries should try other means to assist poor countries to fight poverty, and I support the cause. To start with, poverty is the area of major concern for many poor countries, where more than half of there population is dealing with poverty, and to overcome this problem lot of rich countries provide financial assistance such as food, medical aid, and clothes, but these barely help the poor country to deal with the problem. Rich countries should start bilateral trade with financially weak countries, this will not only make them financially strong but also it will make them productive. Apart from that, it will also motivate them to produce goods in their own country which would elevate the employment level in their country. Moreover, Rich countries should provide subsidy to the poor country on there imported product, because poor countries have to often pay a higher price for the imported product which take away there all the profit, and being the product is a staple product in the country they have no option left rather than paying high prices. Besides, rich countries should focus on generating more employment, whereas poor countries should boost the local businesses which will contribute to the economy and will bring prosperity to the country. In conclusion, rather than providing medical and general assistance to the poor countries, rich countries should focus on bilateral trade and local businesses to support the poor countries.
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it does not
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help
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countries
to eradicate
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poverty
,
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to solve this problem
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rich
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countries
should try other means to assist
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poor
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to fight
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, and I support the cause.

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poverty
is the area of major concern for
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many
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poor
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countries
, where more than half of there population is dealing with
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poverty
, and to overcome this problem lot of
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rich
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countries
provide financial assistance such as food, medical aid, and clothes,
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but
these
barely
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help
the
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country
to deal with the problem.
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Rich
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countries
should
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bilateral trade with
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, this will not
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make
them
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it will
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make
them productive. Apart from that, it will
also
motivate them to produce
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goods
in their
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own
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country
which would elevate the employment level in their country.

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,
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countries
should provide subsidy to the
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poor
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country
on
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imported
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product
,
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poor
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countries
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have to
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often
pay a higher price for the imported
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product
which take away there all the profit, and being the
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product
is a staple
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product
in the
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country
they have no option
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left
rather
than paying high prices.
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,
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rich
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countries
should focus on generating more employment, whereas
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poor
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countries
should boost the local businesses which will contribute to the economy and will bring prosperity to the country.

In conclusion
,
rather
than providing medical and general assistance to the
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poor
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countries
,
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rich
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countries
should focus on bilateral trade and local businesses to support the
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poor
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countries
.
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IELTS essay Although you are presenting different points of views in your essay, you must present a clear position. This simply means you must let the examiner

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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