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although a huge part of the population suffers from mainutrition in pakistan,we commonly witness wastage of food at public events and restaurants.what are the causes of this issue? what solutions would you recommend for it

although a huge part of the population suffers from mainutrition in pakistan, we commonly witness wastage of food at public events and restaurants. what are the causes of this issue? what solutions would you recommend for it W8dkD
Pakistan is on the top of the list for having highest malnutrition rates in the world, particularly affecting women and children. Pakistan is currently facing the problem of over population. It’s tough to feed a population of 22 crore out of limited resources. In rural areas like Thar and Thal people are living a vulnerable life. Still the water is drawn out from the deep water wells that also contains highest volume of TDH. By using contaminated water the people of Thar have fallen a prey to various health hazards such as waterborne diseases rising inadequate health facilities. Lack of proper early-childhood diet reflects an overall lack of required nutrition across Pakistan. Micronutrient deficiency levels are quite high among women and children. Current estimates suggest that 62% of young children specifically infants and 50. 4% of women are anaemic. But in-spite of such drastic conditions a huge proportion of food is wasted in restaurants and wedding ceremonies which is not just immoral but also shameful. According to an estimate about 40 per cent food prepared at different events in Pakistan, especially at weddings is wasted when people rush towards the food and fill up their platers with more food than they can consume. People take much food in the first attempt and then are unable to eat that due to which the food goes into dustbin. How unethical is that the food which should be utilised to calm the hunger & to fill up the starving stomachs of young children is being thrown into gutters. We live in a country where thousands of people, unfortunately, hardly manage one meal a day and sleep with an empty stomach apart from those millions who are under-nourished. We can tackle this situation by simply making proper list of guests. There should be proper implementation of law & order that there should be no excessive dishes. It should be the duty of restaurants to pack and send the extra food to orphanages and shelter homes By simply taking these measures we can reduce the malnutrition levels
Pakistan is on the top of the list for having
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highest
malnutrition rates in the world,
particularly
affecting women and
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children
. Pakistan is
currently
facing the problem of over population. It’s tough to feed a population of 22
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crore
out of limited resources. In rural areas like Thar and
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Thal
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people
are living a vulnerable life.

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Still
the water
is drawn
out from the deep water wells that
also
contains
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highest
volume of
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TDH
. By using contaminated water the
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people
of Thar have fallen a prey to various health hazards such as waterborne diseases rising inadequate health facilities.

Lack of proper early-childhood diet reflects an
overall
lack of required nutrition across Pakistan. Micronutrient deficiency levels are quite high among women and
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children
.
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Current
estimates suggest that 62% of young
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children
specifically
infants and 50. 4% of women are
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anaemic
.

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But
in-spite of such drastic conditions a huge proportion of
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food
is wasted
in restaurants and wedding ceremonies which is not
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just
immoral
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but
also
shameful.

According to an estimate about 40 per cent
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food
prepared at
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different
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events
in Pakistan,
especially
at weddings
is wasted
when
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people
rush towards the
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food
and fill up their
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platers
with more
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food
than they can consume.
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People
take much
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food
in the
first
attempt and then are unable to eat that due to which the
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food
goes into dustbin.

How unethical is that the
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food
which should be
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utilised
to calm the hunger & to fill up the starving stomachs of young
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children
is
being thrown
into gutters.

We
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live
in a country where thousands of
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people
, unfortunately, hardly manage one meal a day and sleep with an empty stomach apart from those millions who are under-nourished.

We can tackle this situation by
simply
making proper list of guests. There should be proper implementation of law & order that there should be no excessive dishes.

It should be the duty of restaurants to pack and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
the extra
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
to orphanages and shelter homes

By
simply
taking these measures we can
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reduce
the malnutrition levels
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IELTS essay although a huge part of the population suffers from mainutrition in pakistan, we commonly witness wastage of food at public events and restaurants. what are the causes of this issue? what solutions would you recommend for it

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