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All university students should do part-time jobs while they are studying. What are the advantages? What are the disadvantages? What is your own opinion?

All university students should do part-time jobs while they are studying. What are the advantages? What are the disadvantages? What is your own opinion? ArgR1

In nowadays, people have many part-time jobs which are appropriate for all university students. The part-time jobs will help them to have more income. The students who do part-time jobs also have more soft skills like life management, time management. solve situations, have other relationships and force them to have the possibility for their position. . . besides, the part- time job have some disavantages that will waste many their time to do while they are studying at university or the students can’t concentrate on study if they are attractively making money. In my opinion, the university student should do a part-time job while they are studying because they will have propriety when they want to apply for a vacation to an agency

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