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All over the world individual today prefer to move from rural areas to city. Some people think that it is positive development. Do you agree or disagree?

All over the world individual today prefer to move from rural areas to city. Some people think that it is positive development. 5rQB
In the modernera, everyone wants to become modernistic. All over the world people today prefer to migrate to urban areas from countryside to improve their lifestyle. few people consider that it is positive improvement. personally i agree with the content, but in some circumstances it may have some negative impacts. To begin with, plethora of individuals are migrating to urban cities from rural areas because in cities they can adopt better lifestyle. For instance, in urban areas people of countryside can get better opportunities and can earn money for their own development. Moreover, some people shift to cities for their higher education to examplify, in rural areas there are not so many higher education schools or colleges thats why they migrate to cities to get better education. With regards to the negative impacts of this migration. First of all, population of the cities will disturb where most people shift and governments budget will also increase they have to provide accommodation for those people who are migrating there. Moving forward, also inflations will incline because when a lot of people will shift to cities then all salesman will increase their price of goods. Moreover, some issues like traffic and pollution will come infront because when city become over populated, these issues become problem. To conclude, improvement of rural areas people is necessary but government should do something to improve their lifestyle. They should provide jobs for them in their own areas.
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modernera
, everyone wants to become modernistic. All over the world
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people
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today
prefer to migrate to urban
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areas
from countryside to
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improve
their lifestyle.
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few
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people
consider that it is
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positive
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personally
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i
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circumstances it may have
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some
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To
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begin
with, plethora of individuals are migrating to urban
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cities
from rural
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areas
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because
in
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cities
they can adopt better lifestyle.
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, in urban
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areas
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people
of countryside can
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get
better opportunities and can earn money for their
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own
development.
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,
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some
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people
shift to
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cities
for their higher education to
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, in rural
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areas
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higher education schools or colleges
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thats
why they migrate to
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cities
to
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get
better education.

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the
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negative
impacts of this migration.
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, population of the
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cities
will disturb where most
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people
shift and
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governments
budget will
also
increase they
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have to
provide accommodation for those
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people
who are migrating there. Moving forward,
also
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inflations
will incline
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because
when
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a lot of
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people
will shift to
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cities
then all salesman will increase their price of
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goods
.
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,
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some
issues like traffic and pollution will
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come
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infront
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because
when city become over populated, these issues become problem.

To conclude
, improvement of rural
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areas
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people
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is
necessary
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but
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government
should do something to
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improve
their lifestyle. They should provide jobs for them in their
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own
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areas
.
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IELTS essay All over the world individual today prefer to move from rural areas to city. Some people think that it is positive development.

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  American English
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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