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After making a presentation in class, you want to evaluate it. Which of the following do you think would be better for you?  watch the recording by yourself  invite other attenders to discuss and give opinions

After making a presentation in class, you want to evaluate it. Which of the following do you think would be better for you?  watch the recording by yourself  invite other attenders to discuss and give opinions AjY1N
As modern education continues to develop, the assessment of presentations in a class has been called into question. Lectures can affect student scores and the relationship between professor and pupil. In this regard, people often ask who the best judges are. Some may hold the view that the speaker can evaluate his presentation better than other attendees. However, I vehemently cling to the notion that other observers can give better opinions than the lecturer. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two of my most prominent reasons for advocating this viewpoint. First and foremost, when a subject is evaluated from different lenses, it can broaden one’s mindset. To be more specific, those who attend a lecture have different background knowledge and ideas, so asking their opinions can open new doors into our sight. It is crystal clear that the lecturer can just focus on time management or transferring valuable information, which might be done imperfectly because of stress or excitement. However, other fellows can pay heed to more details. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in college, I was given a presentation in biology class. Although I wrote a compelling speech and spent hours preparing for every possible questions my classmates could think of, when I asked them to give me their feedback, I wondered by how much a significant number of details were hidden from my eyes. For instance, they paid attention to my tone of voice, body language, eye contact, appearance, and even the quality of the slides. Had I not asked my friends, I could not have gained such a comprehensive perspective about a lecture. Second, innovation takes place when other attendees give their opinions. To delineate, when a group of classmates and professors provide the speaker with a wide variety of thoughts, they can come up with brilliant ideas; something that cannot be achieved by the speaker lonely. It is clear that innovation and creativity are fruits of being exposed to various insights. For instance, when I defended my Ph. D. thesis in front of five professors and thirty graduation students, the last hour of the meeting, the assessment of my speech, was the best part of the presentation. Since professors came up with outstanding suggestions, it fostered my creativity and encouraged out-of-the-box thinking. Their point of view motivated me to think about other aspects of my project and pursue my work, and I invented the olfaction machine with a superior technique, which was the first version in this field. In conclusion, I strongly believe that the best evaluation system of an academic presentation is getting feedback from other people who are present in the lecture. Not only can it expand one’s horizon, but it can also bring about ingenuity.
As modern education continues to develop, the assessment of
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presentations
in a
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class
has
been called
into question. Lectures can affect student scores and the relationship between
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professor
and pupil. In this regard,
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people
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often
ask who the best judges are.
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Some
may
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hold
the view that the speaker can evaluate his
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presentation
better than
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other
attendees.
However
, I
vehemently
cling to the notion that
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other
observers can give better opinions than the lecturer. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two of my most prominent reasons for advocating this viewpoint.

First
and foremost, when a subject
is evaluated
from
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different
lenses, it can broaden one’s mindset. To be more specific, those who attend a lecture have
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different
background knowledge and
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ideas
,
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so
asking their opinions can open new doors into our sight. It is crystal
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clear
that the lecturer can
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just
focus on time management or transferring valuable information, which might
be done
imperfectly
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because
of
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stress
or excitement.
However
,
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other
fellows can pay heed to more
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details
. My
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own
experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in college, I was
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given
a
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presentation
in biology
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class
. Although I wrote a compelling speech and spent hours preparing for every possible questions my classmates could
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think
of, when I asked them to give me their feedback, I wondered by how much a significant number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
were hidden
from my eyes.
For instance
, they paid attention to my tone of voice, body language, eye contact, appearance, and even the quality of the slides. Had I not asked my friends, I could not have gained such a comprehensive perspective about a lecture.

Second, innovation takes place when
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
attendees give their opinions. To delineate, when a group of classmates and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professors
provide the speaker with a wide variety of thoughts, they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up with brilliant
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
; something that cannot
be achieved
by the speaker lonely. It is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that innovation and creativity are fruits of
being exposed
to various insights.
For instance
, when I defended my
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Ph. D.
thesis in front of five
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professors
and thirty graduation students, the last hour of the meeting, the assessment of my speech, was the best part of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
presentation
. Since
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professors
came up with outstanding suggestions, it fostered my creativity and encouraged out-of-the-box thinking. Their point of view motivated me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
aspects of my project and pursue my work, and I invented the olfaction machine with a superior technique, which was the
first
version in this field.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that the best evaluation system of an academic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
presentation
is getting feedback from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who are present in the lecture. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
can it expand one’s horizon,
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but
it can
also
bring about ingenuity.
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IELTS essay After making a presentation in class, you want to evaluate it. Which of the following do you think would be better for you?  watch the recording by yourself  invite other attenders to discuss and give opinions

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
461 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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