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Advices for a good friend

Advices for a good friend r1NnL
I would like to talk about a situation that happens with me and my best friend called Fabiola. She is my best friend since high school. And we have a great relationship. Some years ago she was dating a guy that I didn't like and she asked me about my opinion. To answer that I was totally sincere and I told her how hostile and ironic I seem this guy, I told her the truth: He is not the right guy for you! And my friend's reaction was the best, she trusts in my advice and she broke with this guy.
I would like to talk about a situation that happens
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with
me and my best friend called Fabiola. She is my best friend since high school. And we have a great relationship.
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years ago she was dating a
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that I didn't
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like and
she asked me about my opinion. To answer that I was
totally
sincere and I
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told
her how hostile and ironic I seem this
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guy
, I
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her the truth: He is not the right
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for you! And my friend's reaction was the best, she trusts in my
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advice and
she broke with this
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IELTS essay Advices for a good friend

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
101 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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