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.Advertising should be banned because it brings about negative effects on people lives. Do you agree or disagree?

. Advertising should be banned because it brings about negative effects on people lives. XEKbE
It is sometimes argued that the advertising industry has various disadvantages on human life, and it should be imposed a ban on adverts, while others are opposed to this idea. From my perspective, I believe that AD gain more benefits to people life, it also has more drawbacks. On the one hand, it is undeniable that the advertising industry plays a essential role to develop prosperous economy. To begin with, AD can bridge the gap between customers and manufactures which provides people making better choices by comparing quanlity, prices and functions. Consequently, with a large quantity of posters, flyers, video, they can purchase items that necessary. Moreover, there is a need for companies to release advertisement to society, because it makes significant contributions to make customers know more about benefit products. As a result companies sell their goods easily, evoke impulse buying and earn more profit. Another pros is that the advertising industry offers job opportunities in a variety of calms such as graphic designers, AD director, media directors. This leads to a sharp decrease of unemployment rate and partly ease its problem. On the other side, I think that AD has several cons which negatively affects on people life. The first one that should be mentioned is attractive AD manipulate people to purchase products. Customers is persuasive to buy items that they do not really genuinely need which could causes a considerable waste of money. Graphic designs, for instance, convince people to buy this attractive goods which is redundant. Furthermore, in order to boost sale figures, companies could exaggerate and overate product quanlity and it occasionally conveys misleading messages. Therefore, customers could lose faith in AD and boycott manufactures on which they are not satisfactory with grotesque strategy. In conclusion, although there are several benefits of advertising, it could cause disadvantages for customers. It has never been easy for people to ban advertising.
It is
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sometimes
argued that the advertising industry has various disadvantages on human life, and it should
be imposed
a ban on adverts, while others
are opposed
to this
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idea
. From my perspective, I believe that AD gain more benefits to
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people
life, it
also
has more drawbacks.

On the one hand, it is undeniable that the advertising industry plays
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a
essential role to develop prosperous economy. To
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begin
with, AD can bridge the gap between
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customers
and manufactures which provides
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people
making better choices by comparing
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quanlity
, prices and functions.
Consequently
, with a large quantity of posters, flyers, video, they can
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purchase
items that necessary.
Moreover
, there is a need for
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companies
to release advertisement to society,
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because
it
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makes
significant contributions to
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make
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customers
know more about benefit products.
As a result
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companies
sell their
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goods
easily
, evoke impulse buying and earn more profit. Another pros
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is
that the advertising industry offers job opportunities in a variety of calms such as graphic designers, AD director, media directors. This leads to a sharp decrease of unemployment rate and partly
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ease
its problem.

On the other side, I
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think
that AD has several cons which
negatively
affects on
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people
life. The
first
one that should
be mentioned
is attractive AD manipulate
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people
to
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purchase
products.
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Customers
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is
persuasive to
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buy
items that they do not
really
genuinely
need which could
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causes
a considerable waste of money. Graphic designs,
for instance
, convince
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people
to
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buy
this attractive
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goods
which is redundant.
Furthermore
, in order to boost sale figures,
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companies
could exaggerate and overate product
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quanlity
and it
occasionally
conveys misleading messages.
Therefore
,
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customers
could lose faith in AD and boycott manufactures on which they are not satisfactory with grotesque strategy.

In conclusion
, although there are several benefits of advertising, it could cause disadvantages for
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customers
. It has never been easy for
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people
to ban advertising.

IELTS essay . Advertising should be banned because it brings about negative effects on people lives.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
6.0
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