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Advertisements have become an essential part of the economy in light of the fact that advertising platforms have developed rapidly over the past few decades, such as social media.

Advertisements have become an essential part of the economy in light of the fact that advertising platforms have developed rapidly over the past few decades, such as social media. wxE6d
Advertisements have become an essential part of the economy in light of the fact that advertising platforms have developed rapidly over the past few decades, such as social media. Nowadays, companies focus more on announcing that their products are new. This essay will examine some factors that might cause this phenomenon and why it is a completely negative change. There might be two significant reasons. Firstly, advertisements have been existing for a donkey’s years. Consequently, people have started to get used to it; ergo, advertising companies have to find a number of new methods to promote their merchandise. For instance, most chocolates have a quite similar taste, even though there may be a slight difference between the two brands. As a result, most customers would not be appealed to an advertisement that talks about the flavour of the snack. Secondly, new products tend to be more persuasive since people have the desire to buy things that have just come out. The drawbacks of it can be fairly crucial. We are living in a consumer society which might lead humans into the peril of environmental problems. However, not only do these kinds of promotions not stop this process, they might even accelerate it. To illustrate, the overexploitation of natural resources in order to manufacture more commodities. This is only one main disadvantage of it. To conclude, this essay examined the key factors and the negative impact. As far as I am concerned, this situation can cause numerous brutal problems, if we do not change it.
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rapidly
over the past few decades, such as social media. Nowadays,
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companies
focus more on announcing that their products are new. This essay will examine
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some
factors that
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might
cause this phenomenon and why it is a completely
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negative
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change
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There
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might
be two significant reasons.
Firstly
, advertisements have been existing for a donkey’s years.
Consequently
,
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people
have
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started
to
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get
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used
to it; ergo, advertising
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companies
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have to
find a number of new methods to promote their merchandise.
For instance
, most chocolates have a quite similar taste,
even though
there may be a slight difference between the two brands.
As a result
, most customers would not
be appealed
to an advertisement that talks about the
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flavour
of the snack.
Secondly
, new products tend to be more persuasive since
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people
have the desire to
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buy
things that have
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just
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come
out.

The drawbacks of it can be
fairly
crucial. We are living in a consumer society which
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might
lead humans into the peril of environmental problems.
However
, not
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only
do these kinds of promotions not
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stop
this process, they
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might
even accelerate it. To illustrate, the overexploitation of natural resources in order to manufacture more commodities. This is
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only
one main disadvantage of it.

To conclude
, this essay examined the key factors and the
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negative
impact. As far as I
am concerned
, this situation can cause numerous brutal problems, if we do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
it.
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IELTS essay Advertisements have become an essential part of the economy in light of the fact that advertising platforms have developed rapidly over the past few decades, such as social media.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.5
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