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A university should accept the men and women equally in every subject.

A university should accept the men and women equally in every subject. BaKe6
Education plays an essential role in the society in order to laminate the future of children. But some people say that territory should accept the men and women equally in every subject. I largely agree with this statement. On the one hand, if they give equal opportunity to both genders so meritorious female may get opportunities to take admission as per their desire, which can help to devolp the nation as in the future they would work in every field so they might become a second pillar of home and county too. Further, if female will get higher qualification in every field hence they may work with men and it may help to create the job interesting as a result, they would have different type of views, which may enhance of productivity of company. In addition, nowadays, many citizens are facing the problem of gender discrimination since they think women can not stand at the place of men but if university should provide the this kind of opportunity hence women may get their respect in the society and they might stand on their feet without the help of others. In conclusion, giving the equal chance to both gender may disappear the gender discrimination, which can help to devolp the nation's status, when female will get equal respect in the society.
Education plays an essential role in the society in order to laminate the future of children.
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say that territory should accept the
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and women
equally
in every subject. I
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agree
with this statement.

On the one hand, if they give equal opportunity to both genders
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so
meritorious female may
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get
opportunities to take admission as per their desire, which can
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help
to
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devolp
the nation as in the future they would work in every field
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so
they might become a second pillar of home and county too.
Further
, if female will
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get
higher qualification in every field
hence
they may work with
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men
and it may
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help
to create the job interesting
as a result
, they would have
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different
type of views, which may enhance of productivity of
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company
.
In addition
, nowadays,
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many
citizens are facing the problem of gender discrimination since they
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think
women can not stand at the place of
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men
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but
if university should provide
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the this
kind of opportunity
hence
women may
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get
their respect in the
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society and
they might stand on their feet without the
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help
of others.

In conclusion
, giving the equal chance to both gender may disappear the gender discrimination, which can
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help
to
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devolp
the nation's status, when female will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
equal respect in the society.
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IELTS essay A university should accept the men and women equally in every subject.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
220 words
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