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A Trip which I had taken and I don't like

A Trip which I had taken and I don't like lj7A1
Well, I found of travelling and i love explore different place in different part of India. Here I am talk about a trip which I take oftenly but I don't like. The name of this place is kangra which is located in Himachal pardes. it is our nabour state and also hill station. My maternal grandparents live there. moreover I go there to provide basic needs and other expenses. My parents give me responsibility to take care of them. there are no one to take care of them. so I go there to fulfill there basic needs because they can not to do job or business.
Well, I found of travelling and
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i
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love
explore
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different
place in
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different
part of India. Here I am talk about a trip which I take
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oftenly
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but
I don't like. The name of this place is
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kangra
which
is located
in Himachal
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pardes
.
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it
is our
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nabour
state and
also
hill station. My maternal grandparents
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live
there.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
moreover
I go there to provide basic needs and other expenses. My parents give me responsibility to take care of them.
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there
are no one to take care of them.
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so
I go there to fulfill there basic needs
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because
they can not to do job or business.
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IELTS essay A Trip which I had taken and I don't like

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
106 words
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