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A strange story form my friend

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My friend had got flu with stomachache. So he got to bed early last night. Usually he sleep in the basement so at the night nobody near his. Last night he had some strange dream and he told me his last night dream. A unite of the salmon fish attacked me and I want to against them. At the first they bit me and it was painful but I keep up. So I called my friend and I request support. After that I heard a blam and all the salmon were floting.
My friend had
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nobody near his. Last
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dream and
he
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unite of the salmon fish attacked me and I want to against them. At the
first
they bit me and it was painful
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I called my friend and I request support. After that I heard a
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IELTS essay A strange story form my friend

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
92 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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