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a party that you had participated

a party that you had participated Qlm2b
A year ago, I went to my secondary school friend’s party. The party was held at her family's own restaurant, she decorated everything herself and her parents cooked for us. When I was coming, everyone was mostly there. There were lots of people, I knew some of them, they’re my old classmates. For her birthday, I gave her a pretty couple of shirts. The food was delicious. I ate a lot but what I liked best was her birthday cake, it was chocolate flavored but not too sweet. My friend is a big fan of kpop so at her birthday party, she turned on kpop music. It enlivens the atmosphere. Then we went to sing karaoke near the restaurant. It was highly interesting. The party ended at 8 o’clock. I'm so tired but happy.
A year ago, I went to my secondary school friend’s
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. The
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was held
at her family's
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restaurant, she decorated everything herself and her parents cooked for us. When I was coming, everyone was
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classmates. For her birthday, I gave her a pretty couple of shirts. The food was delicious. I ate a lot
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what I liked best was her birthday cake, it was chocolate flavored
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but
not too sweet. My friend is a
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fan of
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kpop
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at her birthday
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party
, she turned on
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kpop
music. It enlivens the atmosphere. Then we went to sing karaoke near the restaurant. It was
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highly interesting
. The
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ended at 8 o’clock. I'm
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tired
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happy.
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IELTS essay a party that you had participated

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
134 words
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