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A larger proportion of people live and work in other countries today than at any time in the past. It is very probable that in the future there will be no border and people will be able to move freely between countries. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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In our time a lot of people from different countries have a chance to go to any country to work and live there. And we can see an increase of cases when people do it. Personally I think blur the borders is very likely to happen in the future/ as a result this processe/do not see this situation will likely in future. Personally i think that the blur of borders is very likely to happen in the future as a result of this process. We are living in the time of the Internet. People can see how people make their life in different countries with different cultures. Consequently peolpe have a chance to understand where they want to live and work and where they can feel calm. We have modern transport which help us to travel long distances very fast. Therefore people can go to any country they want without any troubles. Unfortunately only people from developed countries can eseally affort it. However people from developing countries have to go to developed countries for work and peaceful life becouse their country can not give them work and money for survivel. This peolpe do not have a big choice. As a result of migration of people between countries the culturul and language borders are bluring. Disappointingly some people think that we can luse traditions of our ancestors. And they do not want it. What is more movement of people from developing countries increases cases of crime in developed countries. And of course this create very nervous situation for local people. I think that world without borders is an amazing dream. But If people become friendlier and more polite to each other and more tolerant to local traditions then I strongly believe that world with open borders will be possible in the future.
In our time
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people
from
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different
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countries
have a chance to go to any
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country
to
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work
and
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live
there. And we can
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see
an increase of cases when
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people
do it.
Personally
I
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think
blur the
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borders
is
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very
likely to happen in the future/
as a result
this
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processe
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see
this situation will likely
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in future
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Personally
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i
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think
that the blur of
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borders
is
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very
likely to happen in the future
as a result
of this process.

We are living in the time of the Internet.
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People
can
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see
how
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people
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make
their life in
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different
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countries
with
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different
cultures.
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Consequently
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peolpe
have a chance to understand where they want to
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live
and
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work
and where they can feel calm. We have modern transport which
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help
us to travel long distances
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very
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fast
.
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Therefore
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people
can go to any
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country
they want without any troubles. Unfortunately
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only
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people
from developed
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countries
can
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eseally
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affort
it.
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However
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people
from developing
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countries
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have to
go to developed
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countries
for
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work
and peaceful life
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becouse
their
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country
can not give them
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work
and money for
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survivel
. This
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peolpe
do not have a
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big
choice.

As a result
of migration of
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people
between
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countries
the
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culturul
and language
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borders
are
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bluring
.
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some
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people
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think
that we can
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luse
traditions of our ancestors. And they do not want it.
What is more
movement of
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people
from developing
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countries
increases cases of crime in developed
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countries
. And
of course
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this create
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very
nervous situation for local
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people
.

I
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think
that world without
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borders
is an amazing dream.
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But
If
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people
become friendlier and more polite to each other and more tolerant to local traditions
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then
I
strongly
believe that world with open
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borders
will be possible in the future.
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IELTS essay A larger proportion of people live and work in other countries today than at any time in the past. It is very probable that in the future there will be no border and people will be able to move freely between countries.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
301 words
5.5
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