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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research.Discuss both views and give your opinion.Give reasons from your own experience and examples where relevant.

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Give reasons from your own experience and examples where relevant. gOO1
It is a well known fact the animals are an important part of ecological system. Hence, a set of individuals are of the opinion that they should be treated same as humans and be given equal living space, whereas, others opine that these speechless creatures should be used as per their convenience to earn money. IN my point of view the usage of wild life creatures is to be mThis essay would discuss both the views and showcase my opinion. The first reason behind the saving and safe guarding animals as thought by a few people is that they play a major role in maintaining the ecological balance. As a result, the whole nature remains calm and beautiful. Thus conserving the wild life is much essential. For example, if they are hunted for their fur or meat repeatedly, this decreases their count and may lead to their extinction which is very alarming. However, there are reasons for utilizing animals for different purposes. Firstly, some countries which are very hot have to use Camels for transport in those desert areas. Secondly there is an opinion that the results and effects of a vaccine is easy to be check in tiny animals like rats rather than humans. For example, many medicines for different diseases where first tested with animals and then given out for humans. Thus decreasing the cost as well as the risk of taking a human life. To conclude, It is always important to keep in mind that we and the fauna share the same Earth, hence it is their right to live here and if we disturb their life cycles and exploit them, nature will surely curse us with some unexpected events. I opine it is our responsibility to minimize the usage of animals for income generation and increase their welfare activities so that our future generations can lead peaceful lives.
It is a well known fact the
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animals
are an
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important
part of ecological system.
Hence
, a set of individuals are of the opinion that they should
be treated
same as
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humans
and be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
equal living space, whereas, others opine that these speechless creatures should be
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used
as per their convenience to earn money. IN my point of view the usage of wild life creatures is to be
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mThis
essay would discuss both the views and showcase my opinion.

The
first
reason behind the saving and safe guarding
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animals
as
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thought
by a few
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people
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is
that they play a major role in maintaining the ecological balance.
As a result
, the whole nature remains calm and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
.
Thus
conserving the wild life is much essential.
For example
, if they
are hunted
for their fur or meat
repeatedly
, this decreases their count and may lead to their extinction which is
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very
alarming.

However
, there are reasons for utilizing
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animals
for
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different
purposes.
Firstly
,
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some
countries which are
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very
hot
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have to
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use
Camels for transport in those desert areas.
Secondly
there is an opinion that the results and effects of a vaccine is easy to be
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check
in tiny
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animals
like rats
rather
than
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humans
.
For example
,
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many
medicines for
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different
diseases where
first
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tested
with
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animals
and then
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given
out for
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humans
.
Thus
decreasing the cost
as well
as the
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risk
of taking a
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human
life.

To conclude
, It is always
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important
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
in mind that we and the fauna share the same Earth,
hence
it is their right to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
here and if we disturb their life cycles and exploit them, nature will
surely
curse us with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
unexpected
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
. I opine it is our responsibility to minimize the usage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
for income generation and increase their welfare activities
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that our future generations can lead peaceful
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.
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IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Give reasons from your own experience and examples where relevant.

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