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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. 9EMj
The relation of animals with humans is quite debatable. Although a certain proportion of people think that animals deserve to be treated as humans, there are a few who think employing animals to fulfill the need of homo sapiens is justified. However, I believe both viewpoints are just partially true as every individual deserves to be treated with dignity and on the other hand it is not possible for scientists to use humans for their initial experimental study. Man, being a rational animal has the upper hand over the other living organisms and considers his life to be very precious. With booming technology and sending spacecraft to all possible planets, scientists have come a long way with the help of animals. A dog was sent to the moon before man landed on the moon. I believe it is perfectly justified to take the assistance of animals in such scenarios. Any new vaccination that pops up in the world is first tried on animals and then decided if it is eligible for human use or not. Also, there exists a food chain in nature, which would lead to an imbalance in the environment if not maintained properly. So, I don't think this aspect relates to the exploitation of animal rights. However, I'm against animal cruelty. Every living organism on the face of earth deserves some basic rights. I have come across instances where a teenager tied a stone to a dog and threw it in a river, poisoning dogs and cutting their tails for fun. Causing harm to another life for your entertainment is absolutely unacceptable and should be made punishable. To summarize, man, being the superior being may use animals for needs like food and research. However, treating animals cruelly is utterly ridiculous and people indulging in such acts must be convicted.
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is quite debatable. Although a certain proportion of
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people
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think
that
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deserve to
be treated
as
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humans
, there are a few who
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think
employing
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animals
to fulfill the need of homo sapiens
is justified
.
However
, I believe both viewpoints are
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just
partially
true as every individual deserves to
be treated
with dignity and
on the other hand
it is not possible for scientists to
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use
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humans
for their initial experimental study.

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Man
, being a rational
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animal
has the upper hand over the other living organisms and considers his life to be
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very
precious. With booming technology and sending spacecraft to all possible planets, scientists have
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come
a long way with the
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help
of
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animals
. A dog was
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sent
to the moon
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before
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man
landed on the moon. I believe it is
perfectly
justified to take the assistance of
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animals
in such scenarios. Any new vaccination that pops up in the world is
first
tried on
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animals
and then decided if it is eligible for
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human
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use
or not.
Also
, there exists a food chain in nature, which would lead to an imbalance in the environment if not maintained
properly
.
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So
, I don't
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think
this aspect relates to the exploitation of
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animal
rights.

However
, I'm against
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animal
cruelty. Every living organism on the face of earth deserves
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some
basic rights. I have
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come
across instances where a
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teenager
tied a stone to a dog and threw it in a river, poisoning dogs and cutting their tails for fun. Causing harm to another life for your entertainment is
absolutely
unacceptable and should
be made
punishable.

To summarize
,
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man
, being the superior being may
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use
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animals
for needs like food and research.
However
, treating
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animals
cruelly
is
utterly
ridiculous and
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people
indulging in such acts
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must
be convicted
.
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IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research.

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