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A government’s role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure (roads, water supplies, etc.). All other services (education, health, social security) should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In every country, a government needs to provide a security and necessary arrangements like drainage connections, roadways, etc. for public daily usage and safety without any interruptions. Some more services were there which many private groups or people in specific communities are providing. Many services are more important for the country like hospital management, school maintenance, etc. Every government should provide utmost care for these services as well in accordance with their importance. Many private sectors commercialized the schools, universities and hospitals. All over the world, people are from different level with respect to their income. Every individual should get treated equally when they are diseased or ill. Some low income people can not afford the quality of treatment which is given by private sectors. For instance, if a person suffered from kidney failure, he may not get treatment of dialysis every month in private hospital due to high fees. Same way, due to high fees in schools, many slum children are not willing to go to school. Our Government should provide a basic necessities which helps to develop our nation and economy as well. By providing free education and free medicine, we can eliminate the illiterate population and can increase the government revenue by educating people and to make them work in their own nation. Although, many developed countries are providing health care and education for free. It encourages people to trust the government and loyal to it. Finally, I strongly recommend that every nation should take care of their nation to be well developed by giving free education, health care and some more necessary things. Due to that, every service will be in good quality and equal for all of the people in our country.
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needs to provide a security and necessary arrangements like drainage connections, roadways, etc. for public daily usage and safety without any interruptions.
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Some
more
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services
were there which
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many
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private
groups or
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people
in specific communities are providing.
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Many
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services
are more
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important
for the
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country
like hospital management, school maintenance, etc. Every
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government
should provide utmost
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care
for these
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services
as well
in accordance with their importance.

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Many
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private
sectors commercialized the schools, universities and hospitals. All over the world,
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people
are from
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different
level with respect to their income. Every individual should
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get
treated
equally
when they
are diseased
or ill.
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Some
low income
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people
can not afford the quality of treatment which is
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given
by
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private
sectors.
For instance
, if a person suffered from kidney failure, he may not
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get
treatment of dialysis every month in
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private
hospital due to high fees. Same way, due to high fees in schools,
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many
slum children are not willing to go to school.

Our
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Government
should provide a
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basic necessities
which
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helps
to develop our
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nation
and economy
as well
. By providing
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free
education and
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free
medicine, we can eliminate the illiterate population and can increase the
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government
revenue by educating
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people
and to
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make
them work in their
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own
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nation
. Although,
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many
developed
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countries
are providing health
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care
and education for
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free
. It encourages
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people
to trust the
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government
and loyal to it.

Finally
, I
strongly
recommend that every
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nation
should take
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care
of their
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nation
to be
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well developed
by giving
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free
education, health
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care
and
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some
more necessary things. Due to that, every
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service
will be in
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good
quality and equal for
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all of the
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people
in our
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country
.
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IELTS essay A government’s role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure (roads, water supplies, etc. ). All other services (education, health, social security) should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community.

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