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A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many countries has been becoming global, and it makes countries are developed faster and interesting, In terms of popualtion and mixture of nationalities. consequently If we visit national city which lives many foreigner. For example London or New York eat, you will be able to find various culture and food and clothes easily. However some countries are suffering with many immigrator. For instance, UK used to be erupian union, they had to received many refugee from poor country. They moved to UK and then stealing stuffs, sometimes, They did terror to innocent people, and that people had to die by terrorist. I don’t want to judge them. As a result of received many immigrator, UK was suffering from many immigrator. They made specific place which is china town, muslim town. And then local people has to move out from their specific place. Except for(Apart from this)problem, I totally agree with becomming global country. we are living in global generation that we never had before. Each countries has built close relationship and helping each other. For example eropian union helps each other then they have developed rapidly. It’s very complimantary for each country. In conclusion, we should make the rules which can prevent serious crime from immigration. And barriers between nations make lower without crime. Then the world will be peaceful then ever.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
Many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
You should probably use “have”.have
has
 been becoming global, and it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createsconstructsmanufacturesproduces
makes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
are developed
 faster and interesting, In terms of Possible spelling mistake found.population
popualtion
 and mixture of nationalities.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.Consequently
consequently
 If we visit national city which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 foreigner. For example
 London or New York eat, you will be able to find various culture and food and clothes easily
. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?However,
However
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 are suffering with Possible agreement error. The noun immigrator seems to be countable; consider using: “many immigrators”.many immigrators
many immigrator
.

For instance
, UK This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to be Possible spelling mistake found.eruptionPeruvianrupiah
erupian
 union, they had to The verb after “to” should be in the base form: “receive”.receive
received
Possible agreement error. The noun refugee seems to be countable; consider using: “many refugees”.many refugees
many refugee
 from poor You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
. They This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocated
moved
 to UK and then stealing stuffs,

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :in some instances
sometimes
, They did terror to innocent This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
, and that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 had to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :pass away
die
 by terrorist. I don’t want to judge them.

As a result
 of received Possible agreement error. The noun immigrator seems to be countable; consider using: “many immigrators”.many immigrators
many immigrator
, UK was suffering from Possible agreement error. The noun immigrator seems to be countable; consider using: “many immigrators”.many immigrators
many immigrator
. They made specific place which is china town, Possible spelling mistake found.MuslimMuslimsmuslinmusicmuseumslim
muslim
 town.

And then local This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
If ‘people’ is plural here, don’t use the third-person singular verb.have
has
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocate
move
 out from their specific place.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :with the exception of
Except for
(Apart from this)problem, I totally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 with Possible spelling mistake found.becoming
becomming
 global You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.We
we
 are living in global generation that we never had This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
.

‘Each’, ‘every’, ‘either’ and ‘neither’ are used with singular. Did you mean “all”?All
Each
The noun should probably be in the singular form: “country”?country
countries
You should probably use “have”.have
has
 built close relationship and helping each other. For example
Possible spelling mistake found.EuropeanerosionUtopianeolianutopian
eropian
 union This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assists
helps
 each Did you mean “other than”?other than
other then
 they have developed rapidly
.

It’s This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
Possible spelling mistake found.complimentary
complimantary
 for each country.

In conclusion
, we should This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :requirements
rules
 which can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :preclude
prevent
 serious crime from immigration. And barriers between nations This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 lower without crime.

Then the world will be peaceful then ever. 