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2864 describe a situation when a friend was really lateyou should saywhat you were planning to attend togetherwhere you waitedwhat excuse did your friend giveand explain how you felt about the person being late v.1

2864 describe a situation when a friend was really lateyou should saywhat you were planning to attend togetherwhere you waitedwhat excuse did your friend giveand explain how you felt about the person being late v. 1
Internet and cell phones have offered a myriad of applicable methods in several aspects in modern life; their online applications on social relationships have become indispensable. Although there are still drawbacks of interact socially online by these ways, I believe that their advantages are more significant. To begin with, depending on mobile online applications in social communication could cause hazardous influence on individuals’ psychological state. To illustrate, a recent study by the University of Singapore, involved about 10. 000 psychological patients, showed that 3 out of 10 of these patients are suffering from alienation and loneliness as a result of their social behavior, and the lack of face-to-face interactions with their social networks is a major contributory factor. As this example illustrated, if people communicate with others online without enjoy the sense of gathering, this could result psychological disturbances. Nevertheless, I suppose the advantages of using online social platforms would eclipse their negatives as saving time is one of these merits. This is exemplified by, organizing social events, namely birthday parties or family outing, have become easier by creating an event on Facebook, the well-known social platform. This shown, many people could keep in touch with their beloved ones all day long throughout mobile apps which facilitate their communication. Furthermore, social media facilitate gaining information by its instant notifications; people could realize a plethora of world news which enrich their knowledge. For instance, many people all over the world updated with the Egyptian revolution events, in 2011, by surfing the internet such as Google and YouTube websites. In conclusion, despite the negative influence of using smart phones and the internet on individuals’ psychological state, I hold the notion that its advantages exceed the drawbacks it may cause. Because not only do online applications facilitate people’s social communication, but also it could provide them with valuable information.
Internet and cell phones have offered a myriad of applicable methods in several aspects in modern life; their
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online
applications on
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social
relationships have become indispensable. Although there are
still
drawbacks of interact
socially
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online
by these ways, I believe that their advantages are more significant.

To
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begin
with, depending on mobile
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online
applications in
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social
communication could cause hazardous influence on individuals’
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psychological
state. To illustrate, a recent study by the University of Singapore, involved about 10. 000
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psychological
patients,
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showed
that 3 out of 10 of these patients are suffering from alienation and loneliness
as a result
of their
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social
behavior, and the lack of face-to-face interactions with their
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social
networks is a major contributory factor. As this example illustrated, if
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people
communicate with others
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online
without enjoy the sense of gathering, this could result
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psychological
disturbances.

Nevertheless
, I suppose the advantages of using
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online
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social
platforms would eclipse their negatives as saving time is one of these merits. This
is exemplified
by, organizing
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social
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events
,
namely
birthday parties or family outing, have become easier by creating an
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event
on Facebook, the well-known
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social
platform. This shown,
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many
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people
could
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keep
in touch with their beloved ones all day long throughout mobile apps which facilitate their communication.

Furthermore
,
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social
media facilitate gaining information by its instant notifications;
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people
could realize a plethora of world news which enrich their knowledge.
For instance
,
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many
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people
all over the world updated with the Egyptian revolution
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events
, in 2011, by surfing the internet such as Google and YouTube websites.

In conclusion
, despite the
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negative
influence of using smart phones and the internet on individuals’
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psychological
state, I hold the notion that its advantages exceed the drawbacks it may cause.
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Because
not
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only
do
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online
applications facilitate
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people’s
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social
communication,
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but
also
it could provide them with valuable information.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 2864 describe a situation when a friend was really lateyou should saywhat you were planning to attend togetherwhere you waitedwhat excuse did your friend giveand explain how you felt about the person being late v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
306 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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