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2. Is it better for people to live in the same place all their lives or to live in different places? Give reasons and examples to support your views.

2. Is it better for people to live in the same place all their lives or to live in different places? Give reasons and examples to support your views. dol1o
It has been estimated that 45% of people travel 4x a year. However have you thought about the troubles one has to face just to travel to a different country? While you can get better and more developed jobs by moving place to place, it is better to stay in one place because married people who have kids cannot to move frequently, the unity of a community is disturbed, and the traveling itself is very expensive. Countries which are not considered safe have to go through multiple procedures just to visit a country which makes the process tiring. First, it is better to stay in one place because people who are married and have kids find it hard to move frequently. When one is married more things need to be considered like their child’s health, education and would moving to this certain place even benefit them? Visiting countries just for thrill can be exciting but for these people, it is hard to just move because their priorities become their children. Think about it would you be willing to move into an entirely different country just for a change of environment knowing that your child’s life will be affected? Yes some of you might consider this but that must be because you do not have any kids “Happiness is having a large loving caring family” this phrase by George burns must be noted since it explains how even the most successful people consider family as the greatest source of joy. Traveling won’t make you fin love but the comfort of your family might. Additionally, the unity of a community is also disturbed by moving places too much. When you stay in one place you make yourself part of a community which strengthens your bond. Your community will be with you in your hard times as well as your joyful times. Whichever community you belong to that is what will represent you. However if you keep moving too much you won’t be able to form a bond with anyone and there will be no one person you can trust. That is why it is important to stay in one place so that there are people who can help you. Finally, it is better to stay in one place because traveling is very expensive. Plane tickets, buying food, buying clothes, shopping all this becomes very expensive and to budget this all also becomes problematic. When you move country by country you do not have a qualified job and your earnings are also very low this means that not many companies would be willing to hire you hence to afford your travel becomes hard. It should also be kept in mind those countries which are not considered safe need to go through multiple procedures just to verify themselves as a safe person. This often takes 8 months minimum. Therefore is it even logical to spend so much money and patience just to have a change of environment? It is true that moving from place to place does allow you to see new cultures experience more things and learn new languages however the real question is are you willing to go through all this hustle to visit a new place that might not even welcome you? Thus, while you can get better and more developed jobs by moving place to place, it is better to stay in one place.
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been estimated
that 45% of
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travel 4x a year.
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just
to travel to a
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different
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country
? While you can
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get
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better
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moving
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place
to
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, it is
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better
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because
married
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people
who have kids cannot to
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move
frequently
, the unity of a
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community
is disturbed
, and the traveling itself is
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very
expensive.
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Countries
which are not considered safe
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have to
go through multiple procedures
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just
to visit a
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country
which
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makes
the process tiring.

First
, it is
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better
to
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stay
in one
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place
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because
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people
who
are married
and have kids find it
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hard
to
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move
frequently
. When one
is married
more things need to
be considered
like their child’s health, education and would
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moving
to this certain
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place
even benefit them? Visiting
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countries
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just
for thrill can be exciting
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but
for these
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people
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hard
to
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just
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because
their priorities
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their children.
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about it would you be willing to
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move
into an
entirely
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different
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country
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just
for a
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change
of environment knowing that your child’s life will be
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affected
? Yes
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some
of you might consider this
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but
that
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be
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you do not have any kids “Happiness is having a large loving caring family” this phrase by George burns
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must
be noted
since it
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explains
how even the most successful
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people
consider family as the greatest source of joy. Traveling won’t
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make
you fin
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love
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but
the comfort of your family might.

Additionally
, the unity of a
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community
is
also
disturbed by
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places
too much.
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When
you
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in one
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place
you
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make
yourself part of a
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community
which strengthens your bond. Your
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community
will be with you in your
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hard
times
as well
as your joyful times.
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Whichever
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community
you belong to
that is
what will represent you.
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However
if you
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keep
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moving
too much you won’t be able to form a bond with anyone and there will be no one person you can trust.
That is
why it is
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important
to
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stay
in one
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place
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so
that there are
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people
who can
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help
you.

Finally
, it is
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better
to
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stay
in one
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place
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because
traveling is
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very
expensive.
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Plane
tickets, buying food, buying clothes, shopping all this
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becomes
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very
expensive and to budget this all
also
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becomes
problematic. When you
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move
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country
by
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country
you do not have a qualified job and your earnings are
also
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very
low this means that not
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many
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companies
would be willing to hire you
hence
to afford your travel
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becomes
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hard
. It should
also
be
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kept
in mind those
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countries
which are not considered safe need to go through multiple procedures
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just
to verify themselves as a safe person. This
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often
takes 8 months minimum.
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Therefore
is it even logical to spend
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much money and patience
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just
to have a
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change
of environment?

It is true that
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moving
from
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place
to
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place
does
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allow
you to
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see
new cultures experience more things and learn new languages
however
the real question is are you willing to go through all this hustle to visit a new
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place
that might not even welcome you?

Thus
, while you can
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get
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better
and more developed jobs by
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moving
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place
to
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place
, it is
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better
to
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stay
in one
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place
.
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IELTS essay 2. Is it better for people to live in the same place all their lives or to live in different places? Give reasons and examples to support your views.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
564 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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