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zoos play a important role in our life

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One the one hand, zoos also has many positives sides. First, zoo play a crucial role in wild life conservation where they can help to protect endangered species and their habitats and improve many skills to communicate with humans. For instance as we can see many animals are taught to perform with people and it will help it close to humans world. Secondly, zoos permission scientists to study animals and their behavior so we can know many information to learn about it. Thirdly, zoos which are educational, interesting and fun so an abundance of children can come here to watch or learn about animals. Besides that zoos can employs a plethora of job opportunities for many people who is really love animals and see it as a friends.
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IELTS academic zoos play a important role in our life

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  American English
1 paragraphs
128 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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