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Your manager has asked you to do a presentation at the upcoming training session. Write a letter to your manager and say – What is the topic of the presentation? – What is the benefit of conducting a session on that topic? – What are your requirements for conducting this presentation?

Your manager has asked you to do a presentation at the upcoming training session. Write a letter to your manager and say – What is the topic of the presentation? – What is the benefit of conducting a session on that topic? – What are your requirements for conducting this presentation? AooL
The mentioned diagram demonstrate the proportions of daily intake of three distinct nutrients, which can cause an adverse effect of excess amount f consumption on individual's body. the data for above demonstration is gathered from United States f America (U. S. A. ) The first pie-chart express the consumption of sodium in breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks. The intake of sodium is highest in dinner than any other meal that is 43% whereas, people in USA consumes equal proportion of sodium in snacks and breakfast. They are most likely to eat 14% of it in snacks and breakfast and 29% of sodium is consumed through lunch. Switching on saturated fats, on an average, folks in USA eat 37% of saturated fat in their dinner which is by far the peak intake throughout the day. The lowest consumption of fat is in breakfast that is 16% and usually goes 26% of fat in body at lunch however, slight lower than lunch, about 21% of fat is consumed in their snacks. Concentrating on the added sugar, anyhow most of the people do not prefer to have sugar in mostly all the meals except snacks. As a result, 42% of added sugar is consumed in snacks which is the highest amongst all. Despite of having such high amount of sugar consumption, 16%, 19% and 23% of added sugar is consumed in breakfast, lunch and dinner respectively. All in all, consumption of nutrients is good for health, on the contrary over intake of every nutrient can lead to have an worst effect on individual's health.
The mentioned diagram demonstrate the proportions of daily
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intake
of three distinct nutrients, which can cause an adverse effect of excess amount f
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consumption
on individual's body.
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the
data for above demonstration
is gathered
from United States f America (U. S. A.
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first
pie-chart express the
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consumption
of sodium in
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breakfast
,
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dinner
, lunch and
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snacks
. The
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intake
of sodium is highest in
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dinner
than any other meal
that is
43% whereas,
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people
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in USA
consumes equal proportion of sodium in
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snacks
and
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breakfast
. They are most likely to eat 14% of it in
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snacks
and
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breakfast
and 29% of sodium is
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consumed
through lunch. Switching on saturated
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fats
, on an average, folks
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in USA
eat 37% of saturated
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fat
in their
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dinner
which is by far the peak
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intake
throughout the day. The lowest
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consumption
of
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fat
is in
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breakfast
that is
16% and
usually
goes 26% of
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fat
in body at lunch
however
, slight lower than lunch, about 21% of
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fat
is
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consumed
in their snacks.

Concentrating on the
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sugar
, anyhow most of the
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people
do not prefer to have
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sugar
in
mostly
all the meals except
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snacks
.
As a result
, 42% of
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added
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sugar
is
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consumed
in
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snacks
which is the highest amongst all.
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Despite of
having such high amount of
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sugar
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consumption
, 16%, 19% and 23% of
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added
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sugar
is
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consumed
in
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breakfast
, lunch and
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dinner
respectively
.

All in all,
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consumption
of nutrients is
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good
for health,
on the contrary
over
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intake
of every nutrient can lead to have
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an
worst effect on individual's health.
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IELTS academic Your manager has asked you to do a presentation at the upcoming training session. Write a letter to your manager and say – What is the topic of the presentation? – What is the benefit of conducting a session on that topic? – What are your requirements for conducting this presentation?

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3 paragraphs
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6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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