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Writing task 1 The line graph gives information about the number of people who were buying from three various kind of book's trade through the period from 2002 to 2006.

Writing task 1 The line graph gives information about the number of people who were buying from three various kind of book's trade through the period from 2002 to 2006. l58K
Writing task 1 The line graph gives information about the number of people who were buying from three various kind of book's trade through the period from 2002 to 2006. It is clear that educational book of sales increased slightly, but children's books of trade became more popularity than other books among buyers. Between 2002 and 2003, children's books and educational books of sales began to go up, while adult fiction trades started to go down in those years. Following that, children's books of sales continued to grow, and also adult fiction began to rise, but educational book of trades decreased during a year. The most interesting, book sellers have found almost 45 million dollars to sell from children's books over the period from 2005 to 2006. Moreover, they found so much more income to sell from educational books approximately 32 million dollars. However, adult fiction of sales declined, so they earned less profit those book than other books through the period of 2 years.
Writing task 1

The line graph gives information about the number of
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people
who were buying from three various
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kind
of book's
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trade
through the period from 2002 to 2006.

It is
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clear
that
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educational
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book
of
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sales
increased
slightly
,
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but
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children's
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books
of
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trade
became more popularity than other
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books
among buyers.

Between 2002 and 2003,
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children's
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books
and
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educational
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books
of
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sales
began to go up, while adult fiction
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trades
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started
to go down in those years. Following that,
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children's
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books
of
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sales
continued to grow, and
also
adult fiction began to rise,
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but
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educational
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book
of
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trades
decreased during a year.

The most interesting,
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book
sellers have found almost 45 million dollars to sell from
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children's
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books
over the period from 2005 to 2006.
Moreover
, they found
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so
much more income to sell from
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educational
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books
approximately 32 million dollars.
However
, adult fiction of
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sales
declined,
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so
they earned less profit those
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book
than other
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books
through the period of 2 years.

IELTS academic Writing task 1 The line graph gives information about the number of people who were buying from three various kind of book's trade through the period from 2002 to 2006.

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
165 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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