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Writing task 1- expenditure on health and education, UAE as percentage of GDP and infant mortality and life expectancy, 1979-1992

Writing task 1- expenditure on health and education, UAE as percentage of GDP and infant mortality and life expectancy, 1979-1992 Gl2wm
The given bar chart and line show the percentage of expenditure on health and education from total GDP by UAE and infant mortality and life expectancy between 1970 and 1992. Overall, government spent the highest amount on education and the graph of life expectancy shows upward trend while infant mortality experienced downward trend. In the bar chart, the spending on education was more than health which accounts for 10% and for health it was only 8% in 1985. After that in 1990, the spending on education inclined sharply to 14% while in case of education the spending little decrease. At last in 1993, nearly 15% of money was spent on education and 10% on health. In line graph, in 1970 the mortality rate was higher which was 70 deaths per 1000 births than life expectancy which accounts for 60 years. From 1970 and 1992, the death rate decreased sharply and reached at 20 whereas the life expectancy increase and become 70 years.
The
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given
bar chart and line
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show
the percentage of expenditure on health and
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education
from total GDP
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by UAE
and infant mortality and
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life
expectancy between 1970 and 1992.

Overall
,
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government
spent the highest amount on
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education
and the graph of
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life
expectancy
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shows
upward trend while infant mortality experienced downward trend.

In the bar chart, the spending on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
was more than health which accounts for 10% and for health it was
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only
8% in 1985. After that in 1990, the spending on
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education
inclined
sharply
to 14% while in case of
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education
the spending
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little
decrease. At last in 1993,
nearly
15% of money
was spent
on
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education
and 10% on health.

In line graph, in 1970 the mortality rate was higher which was 70 deaths per 1000 births than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
expectancy which accounts for 60 years.
Nonstandard phrase. Did you mean: "From 1970 to 1992"?
From 1970 and 1992
, the death rate decreased
sharply
and reached at 20 whereas the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
expectancy increase and become 70 years.
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IELTS academic Writing task 1- expenditure on health and education, UAE as percentage of GDP and infant mortality and life expectancy, 1979-1992

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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