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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of businesses which used social media for business purposes from 2012 to 2016.

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of businesses which used social media for business purposes from 2012 to 2016. Overall, large business had the highest percentage of using social media in each year with approximate 80% and the lowest was small business. Through the time, the percent in each type of business had an impressive increase. The bar chart shows that there was a level off from 2012 to 2014 in large business. The figure for 2015 rose approximately 50% and grew up to 80% in 2016. According to the medium business there was more than 50% if businesses using social media for their purposes in 2016. There was an significantly increase between 2012 and 2014 and 30% was the proportion in 2015. It can be seen that small business didn’t care too much about social media or maybe they didn’t have enough fee for their business purposes in social media, but in the era of 4. 0 they needed social media to develop their business. There was a slightly increase between 2012 to 2014. The amount in 2016 improved sharply in 2016 with 50%.
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used
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social
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for
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purposes from 2012 to 2016.

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had the highest percentage of using
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social
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in each year with approximate 80% and the lowest was
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small
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business
. Through the time, the percent in each type of
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had an impressive increase.

The bar chart
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that there was a level off from 2012 to 2014 in large
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business
. The figure for 2015 rose approximately 50% and grew up to 80% in 2016.

According to the medium
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business
there was more than 50% if
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businesses
using
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social
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for their purposes in 2016. There was
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between 2012 and 2014 and 30% was the proportion in 2015.

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or maybe they didn’t have
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fee for their
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purposes in
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,
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in the era of 4. 0 they needed
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to develop their
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. There was a
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the proportion of businesses which used social media for business purposes from 2012 to 2016.

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